by cutestguy
I was surprised by the fact that it was written from the woman's perspective. Good job.
Personally, I thought you did a fabulous job on this one. It was an enjoyable, passionate read. Frankly telling a story from the point of view of the opposite sex is a daunting task. You did a great job of doing just that. Bravo.
starts promisingly but degenerates into poorly written cliche. Get an editor...really-it could be improved vastly but is so badly written it's not worth continuing with