All Comments on 'The Making of a Man Ch. 04'

This didn't end up at all like I thought it was going to, but I'm glad it didn't go the direction it looked like it was at the start of this chapter. It was interesting seeing how the characters grew and, if you have more ideas for them, I'd enjoy seeing what might happen next. Thanks for the good read.

great story, please keep it going

would like to see rachel realise what she's lost

Feel like you hit reverse on too many characters too quickly here. There are few examples but Rachel being written out that quickly after being willing to go so far with so little regard for Nick is the most obvious. Enjoyed the story and look forward to future work from you, but the ending here just felt a bit off.

i think the story was great cant wait for another chapter

Great series with really good character development. Please keep them coming or start a whole new story

Really nice story. The dialogue:sex ratio was higher in this chapter than the others, but it still worked. I got upset when Rachel and Jen became abusive (which seemed out of character for them), but I'm glad you didn't take the story down that path.

Absolutely brilliant! Loved every bit of it !!!

Party in Florida and threesome. All kind of material to keep writing this story. No rush have fun writing..cheers

When will the next part come?? You write very well...

Wonderful story so far thank you. You make hard spots too!.