All Comments on 'The Marine Ch. 01'

Great story! But all my friends that live in Australia root they don't fuck! That kind of ruin it for me.

A good start. I look forward to reading more.

I'm hoping he ends up with his sister D:

Good story but only 4 stars.

Did Amy give her cherry to another bloke?

What about Katie? She was 18.

Can’t wait for the next chapter.

I loved your story of the "Marine" leaving a loved one is never easy and you have captured that beautifully with the build up and ever deepening emotions between your two lead characters. I'm glad this was a love story and not one filled with lust but that of course means the emotions will be more intense. It just remains to be seen where you take their story. I have my own ideas but I will happily wait to see if yours coincides with mine. 5 stars absolutely.

A hearfelt emotional ride! A beautiful love story between a brother and sister that transcends the taboo!

Once again the start of another fantastic story. Can't believe you going to keep us in suspense over multi chapters till we get to happy ending. But drama and tension makes the stories better.

For my wish i hope you have together with amy in the end.

⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐ excellent !!!!!

Wow, great start. I am eager to read more and soon please so I dont lose the gist of the story.

I think you have hit the jack pot with this one. I liked the fact that you stayed true to the Christmas promise that they both made to each other. I am like other readers that will make comments soon wish for your nest posting comes soon. Please don't wait to long posting Ch. 2 I am a reader in Florida

Great start....for what it's worth tho, my 2 cents is that Nate keeps both his sisters happy by starting his life with them both somehow....Cuz we all know "Sharing is Caring"... Looking forward to the rest of the story!!!

Wow! Very fuck with Amy. You should show her around for permission and data in a hotel for fucking very hard and full of cum. Then for Katie you should put her in competition and dress her slutty fuck to fuck her in her own 18 year old car ...

lots of cum all over for incest

Welcome back! Loved every aspect of it so far. 5*

What a great story thus far. Nate is a bit of an idiot. There are plenty of appropriate special forces in HIS own country that he could’ve gotten into. Commandos, SAS, other special Army units, etc Intelligence. He did not need to leave his family to join the fucking Britis Army.

What a dolt!!!!

Scores 5/5, looking forward to the next chapter.

love it so far and really look foreward to what direction it takes. Hopefully we wont have to wait too long.

Loved it. I can't wait to see what happens in part two. When their Royal Marine commando comes home.

Great story and lots of possibilities to go from here. Please continue story. Can’t wait to see where you go from here. Well written and explained what was taking place and why.

Wow! Very fuck with Amy. You should show her around for permission and data in a hotel for fucking very hard and full of cum. Then for Katie you should put her in competition and dress her slutty fuck to fuck her in her own 18 year old car ...

lots of cum all over for incest

What a family! Couldn't ask for a better Mom and Dad, knowing but not interfering or condemning. Hope they can continue once he comes back. Great story and well written.

Love the story and hope to see many more i. The future. Love that all your story’s end happy. Maybe Nate ending up with both his sisters in the end???

Can’t wait for the next chapters

Another outstanding story. Eagerly awaiting the next chapter

Very sexy! Would have loved to see Nate with a splash of that dirty blonde hair across his chest and abs -- that's very sexy on a young man!

Thank for a very good story.

Getting ready to read chapter 2.

Why did you have Amy not a virgin for Christmas.

She is fucking other guys, but not Nate?

What about Kate? Is she fucking her bf knowing Amy is doing Nate.

Great start. Looking forward to future chapters. 5 stars. Keep up the great work.

Second reading. I love this when chapter 2 came up in my favourites list I had to read,this again to catch up with, things .and so onto chapter 2. Brilliant.

The parents accepting the incest and consenting to let them continue with their relationship makes a huge positive impact on the story. I'm hoping that when you do finally wrap up the story that Nate ends up with both of his sisters forever. 5/5

One of the best if not T H E best.

Bill S.

Having left my Marine (US) son at the airport a few times I’ll say you captured that well.

Bill S.

Which of these is correct?

This: "... "...I think Katie has a boyfriend anyway." She didn't, but I didn't want them messing with my little sister anyway. ..."

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Or where Amy says Katie *does* have a boyfriend here: "... "...So will Katie. I know she'd want to as well, I get that feeling nowadays. She's only got a boyfriend as a distraction from her feelings for you." ..."

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Does Katie have a boyfriend or not? If she does, then Nate should be surprised by Amy's statement, but he isn't.

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Sorry, that contradiction bugged me. Narrative consistency is important.

Now to read the rest.

SSSssooo Emotional...I Love It!!! And looking forward to next chapters!

Five**5**Stars!!