All Comments on 'The Mirage of Control Ch. 03-04'

Well-told, but there's no good coming to any of the characters in the end (except perhaps Phil, who will stroll away unscatched.)

I think if you were posting this in "Loving Wives" it would get a lot of comments--but in "Novels" no one is looking at it.

Thanks,

ohio

If this was in Lovings Wives, you would be getting lots of people reading and commenting on your story. Many would be angry at Jodi and wanting a lot for revenge on Phil. Phil has ruined a marriage.

have back the 15 minutes I wasted reading this crap?

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It says Ch 3-4....add Ch 4 where Wess breaks Phil's balls by kicking them up into Jodie's chin while his cock is in her mouth, severing it.

Then a Ch5 where the author does a little research and finds out the D/s doesn't work this way, nor women think that way...'oooh it's a big cock, I'll screw my whole life up and do whatever the owner says to have some of it.