All Comments on 'The Mistress and the Princess'

I’m conflicted. On the one hand you acquitted yourself very well in your description of the duel. Rapiers are an appropriate weapon for a woman. It’s light and easily maneuvered. By incorporating fatigue as a factor, you earned a gold star. Too many writers depict fighting scenes as if the combatants were in a video game.

On the other hand, you need an editor. As I read the story, I wondered if you had a moral position against periods. You have some serious run-on sentences. You also changed Caroline to Carolina. An editor would have caught that.

I would definitely read a follow up where the contessa humbles the queen.

think it ended quite suddenly which I didn't expect but other then that it was good