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by Natassja

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ProductofSinProductofSinover 12 years ago
good ideas but...

You have some great ideas, but the story writing itself needs editing. It is nothing extremely major(grammar, spelling, the order of details and sentences) but it is what separates a good story from a great story.

Happy writing!

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