All Comments on 'The Orchard Ch. 01: Oon Night'

Love it and want to read more. The narrator's arousal at his humiliation is palpable and his immersion in the fantasy is well written.

If I have a nit to pick, it's the suspension of disbelief that Vanessa (who didn't know of this fantasy island) snaps instantly into Domme mod without any past exposure to this lifestyle.

I wish there were a way to get inside her head to see her making the transition.

Or, if it had been more gradual.

But keep writing!

Love it. Please write a part two!

oh for more it was sexually intoxicating ,and i want to be part of it

Really looking for part 2

Absolutely amazing story. I can’t wait to see where this story and relationship goes. Hopefully there are many more chapters to come as a new D/s relationship was just born.