All Comments on 'The Overwhelming Porn Shop Incident Pt. 03'

A fantastic conclusion to an amazing series. Keep up the writing it's really good.

One of the best subjects and well written! Please try to top this!

Loved the short series, well done. Thank you for your work!

End of part one. Time for part two I think.

I love this whole series! i really hope there is a part 4... maybe she finds herself restless after that time and does it again.. maybe john it black mails her to do it again... maybe dad has medical issue and requires more money,... so she has to do it again and turn up a notch (like maybe more than one guy at a time for an extra fee)... i so enjoyed this serious i really hope it continues.

It was amazing on what the poor girl went through and she still loved it. Please do all of this in the other new story "Gangbang does bad" which you just posted. I would have liked a little more story about how she gets home and how she really feels over a few days. Leaving clothespins on for so long can cause a lot more damage and pain so it may be better to put them on and then rip them off with a string. It would not be put passed someone to actually blackmail her based on all of the pictures and videos that the guys took of her. Someone would have to recognize her. I did read this series before and loved it then as I do now.

What an amazingly powerful and engaging story. It's a wonderful, dark fantasy.

I really enjoyed your stories and went from one to the next. You write well but an editor would be a good idea. The word "bounds" means to walk or run in leaping moves. You wrote, "I hang on my bounds ..." which should have been "I hang from my bound wrists or I hang from the bindings"

Honestly, it was distracting and happened multiple times in your story, but, that being said, you have a skill with story telling. I relish finding a storyteller who has the talent to keep my interest. You definitely have a gifted crafting of your stories. I personally like constructive criticism but hate the need for someone to tear you down. You may have a few simple errors, but they can be overlooked as the story is genuinely a good one especially for anyone who enjoys bondage and humiliation as a kink.

The whole point of non-consent is for it to be, well, non-consent. The ending basically ruined that. Instead of an unwilling girl getting raped due to a bad predicament, it's now just a slut who only needed a little push to embrace her true nature.

She did not consent, therefore it is a noncon story. It's not that hard to grasp.

Absolutely amazing..... Loved it

Amazing story! In this story, like so many others on this site, reluctance hides inner, often unconscious desires, that are uncovered. Rape stories are not pleasant at all.

I enjoyed this story. Well done. I do agree with other commenters that your story could be well served by some judicious editing, spelling errors and a few continuity errors but those didn't ruin the overall impact of what you wrote. I hope to see more from you!

A nice twist on a story of a young girl helping her dad!

Loved it.

Jessica, is a 19 year old daughter that wants to help her father with his porn shop that is on the brink of going bankrupt. She has figured out a plan behind the back of her dad, because when she mentioned it to him, he was opposed to it. So she secretly worked out a special promotion stunt to save the store from closing. What follows next is a real state of the art well written story. It's a perfect example of how far a mind and body can be pushed beyond its limits. How every single level of humiliation is checked off on this list of complete depravation and total perversity. A few minutes before the event would start, the escort hired didn’t showed up and a couple of dozens of man have gathered in front of the store. As Jessica opens the door to explain the crowd that the promotion sales have been cancelled, all those men stampede into the store and mistakenly seen her for the escort. Before she can speak one word she’s immediately gagged with a gag ball. She’s facing the wild, horny crowd and confronted with a big dilemma. Will she take the place of the escort girl and earn the needed money to save her dads job or will she try to make clear that this is an accidental mistake. As she has not very much of a choice (not knowing what intentions all these men have in mind), she accepts the challenge but doesn’t know that from the next minute she’s going to be swept from hell to heaven or both at the same time for the next couple of hours. With every humiliation and being debased, Jessica loses more of her dignity. With every new item bought from the shelves in the store, and used on her for a couple of minutes, she is stripped layer after layer of her self esteem. She is stripped naked, handcuffed, abused and tortured with paddles and floggers, nipples clamps attached to her swinging udders, with weights on, her pussylips and clit clamped as well. Every object bought at the store, is used to degrade her in becoming a sex slave, a cumdumpster, and a perverse whore loving every second of this, because as she is undergoing her humiliating treatment, with every client taking away a piece of her willpower, she feels a itch growing inside her, like a dark force that’s been hiding deep inside her soul and now breaks out, takes over her body and makes her confess to herself that this is what she always wanted, this is the real Jessica, loving to be exposed outside and watched by strangers. She cums hard from being humiliated in front of the cameras taking videos and photos of her. Not only for their personal collection, but mostly to be posted on the biggest porn sites around the world. And she loves the idea of being completely exposed on the Internet so hard she cums so hard, the orgasms felt during being abused and fucked in all three loveholes in public is something that she has never experienced before. And she wants more, she even begs for more when the event is almost over. I see this story as a prelude for “The Bindr Experience” which is more varied as this story is more raw and ugly. Just the way I would like to be used in the same way as Jessica in my first assignment to be used and abused voluntarily in a porn shop all night long, with no restrictions, but with an obligation to put every video taken or every picture made to be posted on a porn site with all my personal credentials mentioned (and the linked sent to my mailbox as a proof), to make sure that I will be recognised and become what I have always dreamt of...a worthless sex slave who loves to be humiliated and abused in public, used as a sex toy for everyone’s pleasure...for as long as you want, wherever you like and for as much as possible as you desire !!! This is my ultimate dream come true...what a beautiful story, building up the tension slowly to end with an orgasmic blizzard as never experienced before. Top story, keep up the good work. Can’t wait to read more series of you...TheEvilWithin

Well done even if not really my type of story. Missed some things which could be improved by having someone proof-read the story or getting an editor. The biggest inconsistency was having a 3 minute time limit in chapter 1 that changed to a 2 minute time limit in chapter 3. Some other items: before the guy shoved the large dildo up her ass, the guy acting as a cashier, could have used it as an opportunity to sell some lube (more sales). When her arms were moved behind her back, the arms should have been tied with rope (another sale) and not cuffed. Guy who shot up her ass was second to cum inside her not first. Was implied that someone was going to hit her tits (just prior to her spanking) but didn't appear to happen. Lastly, would think there would have been a couple of women and some strap-ons involved. The last scene with John could have been expanded with him taking her in all three holes. The outside experience was not convincing; first of all most porn shops are not located where there is lots of traffic and the even then, was to be late at night wasn't it?

So, good story, if a bit incomplete.

Beginning of the story was a bit confusing. Loss of mother was introduced too late and needed another sentence or two. What did mother and father do before father went to jail? Did mother wait until father was out of jail to leave? How can she afford college if her father is almost out of business? Once the "incident" started, would have liked to have seen a little more feistiness from Jessica. For one thing, after the first 3 minutes were up, the gag should have been removed, same with subsequent items, unless she agreed to it. Could certainly see her flashing the finger when the nipple clamps were added as well as the weight was added and certainly when being verbally abused outside.

Ending was too quick; scene with John could have been extended. An epilogue with her giving the money to her dad and then the after effects on her social life might be fun.

Her getting aroused from the humiliation of what's being done and her knowing that she is the one who put it all in motion is what made this a great series! Having her anticipate her future and acknowledge that part of her sexuality ... perfect!