All Comments on 'The Package Ch. 01'

Very interested to see where this is going to go from here. Also, maybe just make it a bit longer too next time?

Terrific beginning. Looking forward to seeing what the secret is and I agree would like the chapters to be a little longer.

As beginning chapters go (okay, a bit short on detail!), this story has massive promise. Hit us with more, as soon as you can.

-- KK in Texas

I HATE CLIFF HANGERS!!!!! LEAVES ME HUNGRY FOR MORE!!!! PLEASE HURRY.

I'm sorry, I'd already submitted chapter two before reading your comments. I will make chapter three longer. Thanks for your feedback.