All Comments on 'The Perfect Storm'

Your writing is so good and I am starting to think that you should write a book.

Please keep writing as your stories are the best.

Whish i would have experiences like that when i was younger....it did turn me on just thinking of them.

Great idea for a story. Nice erotic setting, and a bit of a suprise on who her partner is. Work on spelling, phrasing and paragraph structure. Probably a simple reading aloud of your story would help you see alot of its weaknesses in terms of grammar and cumbersome phrasing. Consider it a draft and give it another go. It will get better each time you do.