All Comments on 'The PI'

Great but not quite all there.

I great snapshot from a fringe players perspective

A good start, but where's the rest if it?

Wow! Just wow!! 5 stars no holds bared. Bob

A good story, well told. D

Enjoyable story!

5

Some comments are enjoyable because they present what one human predicts that ALL other humans would do, have done. And the ones that get all lawyerly about the penal code.

I thought the story was well written and the end or outcome was appealing. Over my lifetime I have dealt with men and some women that experience cheating/infidelity incidents and one aspect is always true...you never know how the situation will play out. I have seen people not want to confront the cheaters. People confronting. spouses get violent etc. Sire as the sun rises all victims act differently. No one size fits all.

Emotional tension was very well developed.

The weapon, if not used, would be highly effective in discouraging her from contesting the divorce. Sadly, both partners corroborating each other, using the gun constitutes a felony. Not sure if the video would help unless no time lapse could be deduced. If clean, a good show.

Not a fan of these type of stories, because in real life, it doesn't happen this way

5/5!

short and sweet and well done

Well written, and justice served. Of course the pin dick, cucky boys are going to hate this..

Liked it. Concise. Focused. The (brief) moment of tension that the husband would lose it was well played. Would have liked more character development but that was not the poing of this tale.

Well done, obviously. More please.

Great story. Probably 1% of 1% do the cheated apon find out soon enough, and have the resources to have all of their ducks in a row to make the nice clean break. That is what makes this story, the fantasy of have the final uninterrupted say. It was a nice touch that the PI knew from experience the crushing pain will still haunt the vindicating hubby.

Good story, a good BTB

Well worth 5/5 for the short

Short, pointed and well told,

99% of commentors need to STFU! stop demeaning the author. Writing like they are literary critics. WTF

Real)y enjoyed this story...

Really?????

No story here, just a waste of page.

Just desserts, oldest sun in the world and in this modern life it seems more rampant than ever, why get married?

Great story for the burning cheaters, but sad for the PI.

Very nice story. From a PI's point of view...

5*

This should be mandatory reading to get a marriage license.

I pilloried the authors other stories I read. This I loved, totally different from most other LW. Ones, gave deserved 5*

Very, very well done! Tight, well-written and action-packed. You proved once again that not every Loving Wife story needs to be 50K words long with the couple's complete 20K word back-story included! Boom! Paaaa-yow! Done! 5++++/5!!!

Very creative, very unique twist of the cheating spouse story.

Bravo! I enjoyed your story thoroughly!

Yeah

Read it again. Just a scene but a powerful scene. I hoped they both enjoyed it because it ended life as they know. Just another meaningless comment. Again. Isn't fiction great?

Very creative approach to a loving wives story. Haven’t seen this done before. Well written. Thanks

Great short BTB story. Well done 5 stars

I caught My First wife cheating by coming home early .. I went to shoot some Trap on a Sunday .. The club lost power so instead of being gone 4 hours i was gone about 1 hour .. When I pumped a shell into that 870 Remington everything stopped . Man He was begging for mercy .. She kept saying it wasn't what I thought . I told him to get dressed and leave . Sadly I had not pumped a live round into the 870 . Why waste My Life in prison on a Slut and a Asshole ..

Short story that tells the reader everything that is needed.

Enjoyable

Another sad story of 4 ruined lives for what, nobody wins, kids loose a parent, parents lose each other. I am only relatively young 33, but I can never understand what a loving mother is thinking about. It was well written and showed to destructive nature of cheating

"It's not what it looks like!" Why do they always say that. Great story.

I love Good short stories. The author gives all that's needed to

grasp the essence of the situation. Moreover the few details about

the PI's reaction & recall are all that's required to understand him,

without wordy, drawn out fodder.

Loved the writing, story was good too.

No real point to the story, just another big macho man against a suddenly-turned-slut wife.

Zzzzzzzzzzz.

Good tight story. Good pacing. Thanks

A story about cheaters getting what they deserve does not have to be a dozen chapters in four installments to make sense and be an entertaining story. This was terrific. I would like to read more stories from the PI's perspective. But I always was a Richard Diamond fan. I also liked Denise McFarland, a female PI in the Phoenix area who was a Playboy centerfold.

its just a job that somebody gets paid to do. TK U MLJ LV NV why are so many of my comments being held in the moderation chambers.....123 at last count,,,mlj

All were liked and believable

Haven't heard that word since college and that was a long time ago, have to admit it is still pretty self explanatory. The story was short, sweet and to the point. Signed: BTW

Good short and covered story line well

Punishment covered and adequate

Nice job. Using the PI as the POV character was a great choice. 5*

You have a talent for this type story. I have no problem with the husband having a gun and being aggressive with the cheating wife and her bastard lover. I would have had no problem if he had beaten fuckwad even more severely. He should have taken all their clothes and IDs when he left. Really good story.

...please make the PI into a series. 5 stars! Thanx!

Loklie

While waiting in the Phoenix Airport, I shared conversation with a Private Investigator. He had just wrapped up a case quite similar to this. While the husband was confronting his wife and her lover, the PI was watching it unfold on his laptop. After the husband exited the room, the PI, still recording, watched as the lover went over to a table where his coat lay, pulled out a gun and shot and killed his mistress, thinking that the husband would be blamed for her death. The husband probably would have been the primary suspect if the PI had shut down the recording when the husband had left. I thoroughly enjoyed this story.

What else need I say?

Loved it. 5stars

I got a gun out of the dresser and cocked it, then put it back away, turned on the light and said I was sorry to interrupt them. You should have seen them scramble. They had no idea I was there until the light went on. Over 32 years ago and some times I still think I should have pulled the trigger.

Great story. I don't think I have read one from the PI's point of view. Clever. Five out of five.

The length was just right. Just enough sex for the style of story.

I would happily read a sequel of her feelings and actions after the confrontation.

Steve

Good read. short and to the point. Damn right you take a gun with you. Legally, of course. thanks for sharing.......

Thanks.

But what I'm pointing out is the inconsistency in the story.

That you support the story with the never persuasive "stories are not real" says much about the problem.

Are you related to Joe? You share his propensity to respond to an argument that hasn't been made!

"Allowing your side to act atrociously, then applauding, is not my idea of a complete or worthwhile story." - Who said anything about "acting atrociously?" I simply said that you have a cheater and a cheated on, of COURSE you're going to choose sides. I started out here as leaning towards BTB, though rarely scorched earth, now I consider myself more "Consequences." As far as "atrocious" goes, yes, some offenses are offensive enough to merit "atrocious" retaliation. Look at Richard Gerald's "The Bridge." His wife TELLS him she's going to go sleep with his boss and does it! He didn't even treat her "atrociously," just divorced her.

My point about reality wasn't that "it's just a story," just that LW is a nest of UNreality, so expecting reality here is a futile exercise!

Allowing your side to act atrociously, then applauding, is not my idea of a complete or worthwhile story.

The rejoinder "it's just a story, does not have to follow the law", or logic, or physics, or biology, or even be internally consistent- is pretty weak sauce.

Especially when the PI character has expressed his concerns that hubby not be violent, in order for the PI to stay out of hot water himself.

You're wrong. I'd give it a five star rating. You cucky lovers crack me up.

But the cheaters being caught by the husband with a gun is tough shit... They can attempt to file charges and have the authorities do whatever. However when the husband gets out of jail either by bail and/or time served, the cheaters' butts is grass and hubby is the lawnmower. ( wow I have not thought of that old saying for a bunch of years). A big 5

The "consequence" is the consequence of cheating, and of COURSE it's choosing sides! You've got a cheater and a cheated on; whose side are YOU on?

It's my own fault for getting into a discussion about what could "really" happen, but I have to go back to my earlier comment about LW and Reality:

"This is a category with husbands who are ex-Navy Seals/Special Forces, computer and surveillance experts and eat pussy better than lesbians and end up with younger, sexier and more beautiful wives after leaving their cheating wive[s] penniless, friendless and homeless, and we're worried about a husband brandishing a pistol?!"

This is not rocket science, if you beat someone with a weapon in a civilized nation, you will go to jail. If you are a licensed PI, you follow the law or go to jail as an accomplice.

Crafting a consequence story where the aggrieved husband gets off scot free, is not actually a "consequence" story. It's just choosing sides.

You're assuming that hubby and PI are going to tell anyone about the video.

Stupid husband fucked himself. He's waving a gun around and threatening them. The PI has it on tape and the process server saw the gun. Both will testify against the husband to save their licenses and standings. So the husband is guilty of several felonies. So his wife is going to get full custody, alimony, child support, the use of the family home until the kids graduate and half of hubby's retirement. After some time, the kids will forgive her (she's their Mother) and maybe, just maybe the Court will let the husband see the kids while under Court supervision. So your tale of revenge turns into a train wreck for the husband. Next time you write a story at least TRY to make it believable.

1 star

In the "Loving Wives" forum, I expect eroticism. This story had not the first line that set me atingle. As far as the scenario, yes, it's totally believable. But the story was not exciting.

I don't know if you were responding to my post, but I wasn't responding to yours, I was responding to people in general who criticize a story for not being "realistic!"

if a guy needs a gun to deal with a cheating wife and her lover, both naked and unarmed then yes he is a wimp. its my opinion he would display this wimpy cowardly behaviour around his normal life. often people ask why the wife cheated, what were her motivations? answer, she had no respect for him because he's the type of guy that threatens unarmed women with guns! probably suffers from road rage and comes on literotica and writes "fag cuck shit" on any story where a woman doesn't get badly hurt, maimed, dead, delete as appropriate.

scored this story a 5 by the way, just because it wasn't my cup of tea doesn't mean it wasn't well written.

This is a category with husbands who are ex-Navy Seals/Special Forces, computer and surveillance experts and eat pussy better than lesbians and end up with younger, sexier and more beautiful wives after leaving their cheating wive penniless, friendless and homeless, and we're worried about a husband brandishing a pistol?!

OK people lets get a few things straightened out here. I have read all of the comments for which I thank anyone who has taken the trouble to write, I do appreciate each one, good or bad. The reason I say that is because it is fascinating to see how diverse opinions are and the marked difference between the US, UK and AUS. I had the belief that attitudes in the US were all macho, but from some of the comments the impression is that everyone there is so law abiding that no one does anything out of line with the law and/or civil liberties. It is almost as if when a fictional couple is doing the dirty they have a police officer outside the door to ensure that any potential interference from the wronged spouse is immediately nipped in the bud! Come on! they have far better things to do. AUS and UK sentiments seem much more aligned, especially when it comes to the choice between rolling over and taking it like a cuck or not standing for it and to hell with the consequences. I am a Brit and believe me the responses I have written about are easily possible, and a lot worse!(I have had one story rejected because the response appeared to be violent! heaven forbid!). OK, remember it is a fictional story, the only consequences are those in the story, outside of that nothing exists. Of course we all have likes and dislikes, favourite scenarios and so on, so when a story steps outside of what we expect we have a choice don't we ? I have been tempted to post comments on some of the well known names we all see here day after day, but really does their work really bear scrutiny and come out as perfect in every case? Of course not, we all have good and bad efforts. I am not the best writer by a long shot but I do enjoy it, sometimes it is easier than others but I write for myself and definitely not to get good reviews or comments or star ratings, not interested. I like to try something different now and again so I don't use the same formula again and again unlike some. That said I hope the comments keep coming in, I admit one or two have been interesting, but lets not take ourselves too seriously people. After all if we were really experts writers would we really be on here? it is for fun.

Great tale. It wasn't BTB. It becomes BTB when they walk out of the hotel room. That's when it hits them. Fucking cheating assholes.

Is it real? Of course not.

Does the author pretend it is real? Of course not.

Do the same commenters say the same things every time they read a tale like this?

Of course.

Have they rendered themselves meaningless? Absolutely!

As meaningless as I am.

Five Fucking Stars

It did have two major flaws. A couple of the comments mentioned the protag threatening them with a gun. I know one guy said who's going to know. The answer is, the cops. If the guy was pistol whipped he's going to have a split open head or at least a bad bruise. So he goes to the ER and tells the doc he was pistol whipped. The process server has his name on the paperwork they were given. Bingo--he's a witness and can be subpoenaed. It is a felony in most states to threaten someone with a gun. The fact that he brought the gun to the scene makes it worse unless he had a permit to carry. Of course he's also on tape. If the court finds out they can order the tape. In most states the tape is inadmissible anyway so why would he want an incriminating tape of himself threatening someone with a gun?

My guess is that he would be up on charges.

The other major flaw is that you never answered the question, where is the associate? If you're not going to answer it, don't ask it.

In my estimation it would have been better to have the associate present without the gun.

I still like it though. It's a little different take on the LW and was well written.

"Of course men with guns who threaten unarmed people are wimps." Simply an ignorant and uninformed prejudice. Three or more "unarmed" people is deadly force, and use of a firearm is a legitimate response. A large man attempting rape is a deadly force against a small woman, and a firearm is a legitimate response. Stay in Australia, and take your beatings from large fearless men, who hate guns, especially in the hands of the smaller men and women they want to beat. Laughable.

Its a different culture, so embrace the diversity. In gunless societies bullies rule. In America, bullies eventually stop being bullies, voluntarily or involuntarily, doesn't matter to us. Ken Rex McElroy stopped involuntarily, but not before he injured a lot of people first. He deserved what he got.

The use of a gun in this story appears to be totally unlawful and criminal. The invasion of privacy and videotaping appears to be equally unlawful. So what? Remember, its just a story. Another wandering wife, given her freedom to wander anywhere she wants with whomever she wants, except with her husband from now on. She should move to Australia where her lovers can fuck her without fear from dickless unarmed peace-loving husbands. Just put another cuck on the barbi.

then why don't you comment on what you know about then, you fucking moron. How are the police going to know "if no one called them" you idiot. He called his fucking wife, not the cops dumbass.

The writing is mechanically sound, the voices are realistic, but your knowledge of the subject matter is non-existent. Wronged husbands who threaten their spouses with guns and pistol-whip their wives lovers go to jail. PIs who participate in these crimes lose their licenses.

Right about what you know.

The poi pulls a gun on these people and then c alls in someone to serve divorce papers and witnesses the fact that he's committing a felony. ridiculous.

You say: "Men with guns are wimps? Wow, now you got half the nation breathing down your neck. You know the stout defenders of the 2nd amendment."

Of course men with guns who threaten unarmed people are wimps. And, as you say, half the nation which has unfettered access to guns thanks to an outdated amendment introduced in the days of muzzle loaders will be upset by what Cabbage has said.

But Cabbage comes from a nation with sensible gun laws. I come from one with even more sensible gun laws. We don't go around shooting each other very often.

Lue

A little payback sketch to get ones mind of the normal trash posted here daily. 5*

Are you for real? Men with guns are wimps? Wow, now you got half the nation breathing down your neck. You know the stout defenders of the 2nd amendment.

I guess it's not as bad as being compared to Trump, well now that would really be an insult. Sorry "carolinadreamer" didn't mean to insult your idol.

it's ok as a short tale, i always think that guys who threaten obviously unarmed people with guns are essentially wimps, they will display this inadequacy in other aspects of their lives, kind of explains why she was disrespectful enough to cheat.

cuckolding is not a fetish, a cuckold is involuntary, unknowing, unable (for any number of reasons) to do anything about it. a cuckoldress is essentially a cheating wife.

anything else is some inadequate guy getting off on the wifesharing, humiliation fetish, bbc black power, wimpy white guy interacial bull fetish crap perpetrated by internet porn. this is fetish and belongs in fetish.

hotwife? wouldn't touch one with yours

They weren't worth going to prison? He broke two laws when he went there with a gun and hit the guy.

1: Brandishing a weapon.

2: Assault.

I get criticized when I respond and I get criticized when I don't. It's almost as if I can't win with you people! LOL.

I didn't respond to whatshisname's claim because it was irrelevant. My original comment was critical of this story. I then responded to someone who addressed me directly. I will continue to question the sanity of those who enjoy repetitive stories, regardless. If you don't like that, then skip over my comments.

Rated a 4+, come on get serious!

The most reasoned comment I have read for some considerable time has been made on this story by HardDaysKnight.

This bit especially: "It's great that writers can see comments and get feedback immediately on a post. The down side is that writers will alter their style and even their plots to elicit praise from the 20 to 100 people that will comment. We lose our way and post stuff we know will be praised by the usual suspects, regardless of the quality."

I and a few other commenters frequently urge authors here to write stories for themselves. If the readers like the story and say so, that's a bonus.

But if you're writing because you're desperate for praise from the LW commentariat you can simply follow the tried and true formula spelt out ad nauseum by SwingerJoe. The BTB brigade will tell you that they love it. I think it's sad when good authors do this.

Lue

Can you explain in what state you can throw a cheating wife out of marriage home. If she call the police he has to let her in or will be arrested. This unfortunately has to go thru the courts. She has the kids unless there at least teenagers and can make a decession who stays where. He has to pay child support, alimony etc. I like to know how this author could make this story into science friction. So it really only caters to the BTB crowd not real life.

Two questions:

1) What about stories where the husband enjoys sharing his wife but isn't humiliated?

2) What is erotic about consequences? Wouldn't your favorite C&C stories belong better in Non-Erotic?

He claimed he was only responding to comments directed at him.

KElkB showed how he struck first, and instead of acknowledging his error, just slunk away!

That's my whole point! Most of the cuckold stories posted lately in LW are as you say in your first paragraph, and are a fetish, and as there is a Fetish category they should be there!

If the partner (usually husband) is unwilling or unaware (though usually not for long!) we get into Cheating and Consequences and there is no problem.

Cuckolding is a fetish when a couple play at one "cheating and humiliating" the other and the "victim" is getting off on the humiliation. Done this way, both partners are willing participants in it, even if one of them is playing at being victimized. In some cases, it may actually be the "cuck" who is the one writing the script and the "cheater" is the one following it.

When one partner is either unwilling or unaware, then it's not a fetish. It's just cheating.

For not only allowing anonymous comments but allowing Swingerjoe to continue showing the world what a spoiled man baby looks like.

Please continue.

SCHVINGAH JOE is back with another serving of tripe. Author, please don't let Morons discourage you. Continue developing your craft.

This story is a great example of that.

I am often amazed by cheaters in stories along with in real life that for some reason don't connect that their actions have real consequences. Really, this is what you do to the person you attest to love above all else?

Even if their significant others don't divorce them; they usually don't show them the love they once did. Usually end up being treated like the person (slut, dick, etc.) that they are. Just a thing to be used; they rank right up there with all the other sex toys, just more costly. So, why wouldn't you want to keep a cheater around? To be used as a personal sex toy from time to time. After all you now have something to hold over their head and, why set them free to muck up other people's lives; just hang a scarlet letter on them so everyone else knows what they are... After all who ever said you had to forgive & forget to still stay married to someone; hold them in a pergatory for the rest of their life... Sorry, just some ramblings of a possible madman.

Can be thought provoking though; what do you​ do with a cheater? Open the marriage, cheat on your side as well, take advantage of the situation; hold it over their head (never forgiving or forgetting; like anyone really could),... More possibilities that can be so dark a normal mind may cringe at the mere thought.

Otherwise, I like the PIs POV; although, probably not a living recommended for someone if they wanted to find another that maybe​ worthwhile spending their life with; would definitely affect one's viewpoint of humanity.

I liked this story; it was short and to the point.

RE: swingerjoe's comments-- Damn, Joe, now you're being compared to President Trump. You gotta be doing something right. I'll bet your following jumps up a few points.

RE: sbrooks103x you are a good foil for joe; like to read comments as you two have your discussions.

m....jones, call me crazy, but I gave your story 5 points. Maybe it had weaknesses that will keep it off the Times best seller, but who the hell, besides the leftist loons, pays any attention to anything the times says anyway?

Not true,Joe!

Before anyone mentioned your name you were posting your usual rant against "divorce porn."

We get it! You don't like these stories, you don't have to "educate" us EVERY SINGLE TIME!

The writers are going to keep posting them, and the people who like them are going to keep reading them.

Save yourself some grief and give it a rest.

Original POV story. Thanks.

I responded to a comment directed toward me. Just as I'm responding to yours. It's called politeness.

I thought it was a good Fast Read. Abrupt to the Point and No Room for Whining until after all is said and Done. A-Hole found out he lost his Family and Funds to keep his lifestyle going. She found that her Cheap Thrill was Too Costly. Losing not only the so called nice guy husband but her kids as well. S.F.T.L. = Sorry For Their Luck.

You know I could go around almost everyone of the swinging, hot wife, slut wife, stories and say the same thing about them. I bet readers who enjoy those stories would get offended and tell me to go fly a kite(that's putting it mildly).

Not all so called burn the bitch stories end up in violence, divorce or murder. Give us a break, your whining is getting repetitive.

Why is it that the few people that bother commenting seem to try to get their personal preferences and dislikes across to those that could care less? Who the hell are we to tell writers what they should write or shouldn't write, or tell readers what they should like or dislike. Authors have their own preferences, and if the readers like what they write, great, and tough shit for those that don't like their stories. Nobody is forcing anybody to read anything. Entertaining story author, could care less for those that don't think so. It's myself I'm going to please, nobody else.

Fine, you like "some" cheating and consequences stories, but not those that follow some Joe disapproved "formula."

So, mark them down,post your comment on the story and leave.

Why do you feel the need to try to show those of us who enjoy them the "error of our ways?"

All you do is clog up the comments with your battles that nobody can win.