by schumi007
This has got to be one of the dumbest plotlines I've ever read. Guy sends a complete stranger a photo of his wife, and the recipient is able to trace him via.. what? His internet account? A ouija board? Sorry, that - and the odd use of English - just blew it for me from paragraph one.
And for a story that's posted in an erotic site it's hard to imagine the creep who would find it erotic.
Rediculous story. Noone could be as stupid as the dumb protagonist of your story. the Ct. Yankee
the site is getting less and less each day. Is imagination so dead that someone has to resort to tripe such as this
If you want to see how a real erotic story can work, check out Literotica member Selenakittyn's library.
Obviously, English is not your first language. But I'm not even sure it's your second. Work on a believable plot, then use an editor to make your story palatable to an English speaking audience.
This was an insult to ALL the readers of Literotica. Try again with a more believable plot and better grammar, please.
i have seen something like this, but its still a hot story baby, do part II please!
it got me hot like anything.... yeah the plot mite be inspirational but the buildup is exquisite.. forget bout these sick coments dude.. come up with part two
it got me hot like anything.... yeah the plot mite be inspirational but the buildup is exquisite.. forget bout these sick coments dude.. come up with part two
i'm also german and english is not my mother tounge but all these grammar mistakes annoy me, too! apart from that, is this guy dumb or what? he sends pictures of his topless wife to a complete stranger and then wonders that said stranger doesn't keep them to himself... this story is an embarassment!!!