All Comments on 'The Plan Ch. 06'

I understand you are trying to build up suspense in releasing snippets of a story in the form of one page chapters.

And so far, if you read all these pages together as one chapter, you’d actually have a chapter.

But broken into these chunks there is no solid context for the story line that builds and creates true drama. It’s a “ oh I should read this, something might happen, oh wait no it didn’t, forget it, and maybe repeat with next chunk tomorrow” type story. There is no opportunity in the short blurbs to enable the reader to connect emotionally with the story or the characters.

6 chapters in and the antagonist has no persona but he does have a plan

6. Chapters in and the protagonist has no persona or purpose, other than being victim (willing or not … who cares) to the plan

6 chapters in and still no story, but I’m sure there’s a plan for one to begin soon

6 chapters in and I no longer care about action or purpose or psychology or content…I just want to know what the plan is, NOT how it gets executed or the results/aftermath of it, I just want to know what the plan is

Your writing is very good. The plot is original and the characters are well done.

One area to work on is pacing. In a lot of these chapters, nothing much seems to happen. You could probably combine some of these into longer chapters and be better for it.