All Comments on 'The Power of Suggestion Ch. 03'

sorry, but this is just too far fetched

this doesn't really make sense. how did she text her address? She walked back naked so where was her phone? Left her clothes at the beach but brought her phone? And if she was hypnotized, why did she think to text here address?

Sorry but I think this chapter needs re-doing, the whole Steph angle is ridiculous

It’s all fiction, it’s not supposed to be realistic. I think the story is great so far. When will the next chapter be out?

To touch on a few points. I never intended this to be a 'control' story or anything involving something dark. I tried to phrase the power as Thomas suggesting something, then the person it's suggested to thinking something like "that's a really good idea, I wish I'd thought of that sooner," and just going with it, but acting completely normal otherwise.

To touch on the texting her address, she still had her phone with her and was completely coherent, regardless of her state of undress. Her phone would have been in her hand while she walked and, even though she agreed to go back to Thomas' house, she still sent out a text to her friend to let her know where she was. Steph would have gotten worried if her friend never came back to get ready for work and went to check out the address Mary sent her.

I agree this story may have been a bit rushed and will look into revising it / correcting for any inconsistencies in the next chapter.

Steph is a nice wrinkle.

Cute and silly. It makes for a fun read and has been great so far.

J.D.

I have to say, I really like this! The characters are grounded and have reasonable motivations for doing things, the relationships and characters are reasonably flawed yet also reasonably wholesome, and I like the exhibitionism angle with Mary. Steph is also a great addition that both adds extra dynamics and prevents this from being a power fantasy or cheap wish fulfillment. It's clear you had an idea and you wanted to explore it. I honestly wish there was more of this kind of well thought-out writing in the erotica genre. <3

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