by shaqrach2
and different enough that I want to see what happens next. He needs to make his parents change their minds about him soon. That crap will eat at him. Keep the money situation realistic; he is not going to find a billionaire who can just give him 50 million without hesitation or others noticing. The mortgage thing is delicate too. No bank manager has the power to just write it off like it is nothing. It will take several people and a lot of paper work.
Well done so far. Any threesomes in the near future? If I had to give
a complaint, I don't like Faye. He has the whole world to choose from.
Don't go for a fat woman in her 30s
Please continue. I like that Faye isn't your typical thrall. May be he helps her become healthier be losing some weight while still keeping her on the heavy side. There is so much you can do with this story. I always thought being a "consultant" would be a great way to hide talents and have access to people, interesting situations, travel and money.
Good luck. Please continue the story.
Really great start , this looks like it could shape up to be a brilliant story. I like that his first conquest isn't some super slim model wannabe.
The storyline is very erotic and kinky, and I hope that he continues taking care of the women he comes in contact with, and that he makes his slaves lives easier with his help.
He has five months with Faye before her husband returns,and I wonder if she will be pregnant when he gets home.
A lot of very kinky things can happen with him being able to control the women so completely.
Thanks for the read.
Overall I liked the concept of power through touch. However, I didn't like that his first target was a woman married to a man who was away serving our country. I guess it's because I didn't like it too much when my wife left me for someone else when I was serving. I hope that he ends up doing something nice for this Captain of the Marines.
and the first thing he does is fuck a woman 125 pounds overweight?
Your story started out interesting, but I did not even get through the first chapter. To disrespect a marines wife, you made this retired combat marine want to rip off your head and sh*t down your neck. Nothing personal, but I just hope we never meet in real life. Try an oil rigs wife next time.
Well the disrespect for a soldier's wife left a bad taste. Then again that's what we get from an sad sob of a MC.
I'm with the anons. Chubby chasing and disrespecting a soldier's wife are both bad taste. Generally messing with anyone's wife is just a really shitty, but if this, or really either of these, is your fantasy that's even worse and you need a therapist.
Fat women and a soldiers wife tells me all I need to know about this writer. I don't need to read another word of this trash.