All Comments on 'The Power to Control Ch. 04'

Great work. Some gramatical errors but shit was good all through. Thank you for the great read.

and use of wrong words are the only issues I have with this great story line. You should find someone to proof read your chapters before submission.

More, More, More! This is begging for more of the story.

These chapters have been excellent, and my earlier offer still stands. Thank you for sharing your stories with us.

I loved the story and hope you finish it, but the common errors in the writing did through it off a little. if there was one thing i didnt like it was the fact that he was basically treated as the second rate toy, he is the one with the strongest powers and all that but he gets thrown out the second the girls dont want/ need him. i love the story over all and the sex scenes where perfect but that one thing king of irritated me

Please and thank you.

Every paragraph has a typo, and most of the wrong words seem auto corrected... there’s plenty of people on here who would give your story a proof read. It’s a great story, but it keeps pulling me out of it with allllllllllll of those errors....