All Comments on 'The Princess and the Angel'

I see lots of people reading my story, and still no comments. I would LOVE to know what people think of my story. This is my very first story and would love some feedback!! Please don't be shy! Leave me a comment.

Very good first attempt but I felt it moved a bit too quickly and that the princess was a bit too knowledgeable about what goes on between man and woman, especially considering she's royalty back when they still wore corsets. You've got some great ideas and this story has a lot of potential but I'd personally like to see it slow down a bit to allow for more character development. I’ll definitely keep reading :)

The devil can look like an angel... I think this is what this story is all about :(