All Comments on 'The Proposal Ch. 01'

nice erotic start like to see where this goes

I enjoyed the story very much; glad you left room for chapter 2.

Great story, hopefully the line will cont

You tell a great story, good pacing and detail for what it was. Some may want more details in the masturbation or for more action overall, but this is a great start.

You have a few minor editing issues, but overall you did great.

Definitely keep writing, I’d like to hear more about this budding friendship.

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