All Comments on 'The Ranger: Ch. 04'

Maybe add more descriptions on whats happening? ..like They walked out to the fields to look for herbs, or Returning to the pier they noticed..

Right now its mostly what people say, with short descriptions of what they do - it’s hard to follow thats really happening.

I was going to suggest the same as the first commenter. Having good dialogue is a solid base; just need to sprinkle in some descriptions to really strengthen your story and help the reader picture scenes in their mind.

I also appreciate the mindfulness you gave in trying to distinguish who was talking; you can notice the difference between the last two chapters. Nice work!

I think I’ll look into your other works to check out more of your style; may finally make an account and help with editing even, as I have enjoyed reading this developing story so far. - MT

You are doing good, yes an editor, I know I hate hearing that too. You need to expand your character description, not sure what our lead character Kaethorn looks like. So far I like it.

Hey, you noticed :), having an idea is easy, but writing an English 360 story with Rubric, not as much, by the time I reach the last chapter in the last story, it will be perfect!

Like Your writing style

Enjoying the series very much.

Do sometimes struggle to follow the dialogue and who it relates to but even so still good....

Many thanks :)

Fun series so far. Bravo!