All Comments on 'The Ranger: Ch. 21'

Love the story, but you really should get the last two chapters merged with the remainder of the story. Keep up the good work!! :D

Having read all the chapters up til now… the story is a great concept and deserves telling…… however……. Constructive criticism

It’s too confusing, you swap between conversations and time periods with absolutely no separation… you have Kia talking to one person and then in the same paragraph you have him talking to someone else the next day as if it is the same conversation

As for the story itself…. Great framework but it could do with a bit more meat on the bones as they say…. The story begs to be fleshed out more.

For instance… it could do with a bit more background on the two spirit characters…..when they first appeared in chapter on, they came out of the blue with no explanation or even the fact that they appeared to speaking to him in a dream

Having said that I will be looking foreword to and reading the upcoming chapters