All Comments on 'The Ravishing Rose Boutique Ch. 01'

This enjoyable little first chapter is promising and should develop into a fun tale. There is one glaring continuity error, though. Ramona restrains her curiosity and waits a week to enquire about the 'bedroom suite' and its 'special services'. This is made clear when she calls Becca and says she was at the boutique a week ago. Yet when she checks in that evening, she implies that she was there only 'today'. This is the kind of thing careful editing and proofreading should pick up. Apart from that, well done.

great start to your story. Makes me want to head to a "Boutique" and join in the fun.