The Rosewood Box

Lot of wasted dialog, I think this could have been cut down at least by 3 pages. I agree with others, she cheats and while losing husband gains a promotion at work. Somehow doesn't seem right.

Wow, a bit of a mess, yeah?

Read it again and readjusted my score downwards to 2/5.

She won way too much in your story, rewarded for poor behaviour.

Now 2/5

That was an okay story, but it went on too long and eventually seemed like two or three stories wrapped up under one.

Too long for that incredibly weak ending. She ends up with zero consequences for being a pos whore. She cheated. She cheats. She will cheat. She’s a cheater. She’s a cheater because she likes it.

The story of a slut, who lost everything and deservedly so

Then gets caught up with two hedonists and begins gangbanging for fun. Remarries again, but in my mind will get bored with one cock and cheat again.

Yeah, life goes on…… scores 3/5 just

and passed a number of people on the way. Here is the life story of each and every one, including bios of all of their relatives. I think there is a story somewhere in all of this.

Great start, but I lost track of the story when you introduced so many new characters

Good story and you did try to eventually restore Allison, but i still found her to be too skanky.

Overly long, though I skimmed thru her cheating and orgy scenes. I was happy that they found committed partners. However, still overly long despite lacking much in terms of reactions from others such as their boys.

The woman cheats, the guy’s a hero, he falls into a brand new relationship within a week after leaving his wife, and it’s the best relationship in the world. Why don’t you just have him win $1 billion at the same time? I mean, it doesn’t actually decrease the odds by very much.

I think you should consider the difference between stories, and ridiculously unlikely male fantasies. Additionally, if they’re this pointless, do they have to be so long?

Why are we all surprised when an individual reverts to type, they manage to pay lip service for a while (a long while in this case) but when opportunity knocks…well shit tends to hit the proverbial.

The female characters on The Flinstones were Wilma (Fred's wife) and Betty ( Barney's wife)..... and of course, Pebbles.

You're a good writer, but this really needed to be several stories, not just one.

The beginning arc was fine, and it could even have used a part 2 to wrap up Allison's next six months post-divorce.

But overall, there were too many people, too much going on, and the delineations between them blurred. Honestly, the whole theme shifted and I lost interest and skimmed.

Nothing against long stories when they're engaging reads. This wasn't one of them.

Had to skim the last few pages. Wasn't at all interested in the introduction of new characters at the end. You could have left them blank slates and just referred to them and it would work.

Overall the story rated little more than a meh. The husband saw the affair developing for over 2 years and did absolutely fucking nothing? I find that pretty hard to believe.

He had two years to head it off, but he did jack shit. That's no way too live.

Disappointing to say the least. Somewhat interesting for the first 5 or 6 pages, then downhill. It seems volume was added to I’ve it’s more readable story. Except this went off the tracks after that. No where near one of your normal quality works a 3.