All Comments on 'The Salon's Captive Ch. 01'

interesting concept, and yes, please find a little patience and get an English speaking editor

Very good concept, so I was able to forgive the grammatical errors. Chapter 2 is coming soon I hpe!

The story here has possibilities. The grammatical side of your writing leaves little to be desired.

Thank you for your guys feedback, I really appreciate it, hopefully I can finish writing chapter 2 in short times and find a volunteer editor to patch my grammatical problem

It's obvious you speak English as a second language. That said you seem pretty smart and creative. I think you do need to work with an editor, but the good news is this will help you not only fix the story, but it will help you master the language. It's very brave to attempt to write something in another language, and I respect you for trying.

This is a great story! Please continue.