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Click hereThe voice sounded familiar to her, "Mom?" Lisa blurted out in disbelief. The whore on the screen had the familiar voice of her mother.
Douche's grins got bigger, "You wanted your family to save you, right?"
To be Continued...
- COMMENTS
Anonymousover 3 years agoIt's obvious you speak English as a second language. That said you seem pretty smart and creative. I think you do need to work with an editor, but the good news is this will help you not only fix the story, but it will help you master the language. It's very brave to attempt to write something in another language, and I respect you for trying.
deepediaover 3 years agoAuthorThank you for your guys feedback, I really appreciate it, hopefully I can finish writing chapter 2 in short times and find a volunteer editor to patch my grammatical problem
grriz1over 3 years agoThe story here has possibilities. The grammatical side of your writing leaves little to be desired.
zena99over 3 years agoVery good concept, so I was able to forgive the grammatical errors. Chapter 2 is coming soon I hpe!
