All Comments on 'The Secluded Cabin - A Short Story'

What a mess. The very first paragraph introduces no one and reads as if we are already familiar with the main character, his love interest, and their history together. We don't know any of those things.

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The lack of clarity, punctuation, and editing led to me abandoning the story after the first sentence of the second paragraph. Run on sentences are not fun to read. Reading and rereading passages to try to decipher the characters, plot, and what the author intended to write is not fun.