All Comments on 'The Second Date'

This is my first attempt at sharing my writing, so if you've read my story, first of all thank you!

I would love to know what you think!

Good first story. I felt the ending was a little rushed, but I really enjoyed the rest of it. I liked how he came to her rescue in the beginning, very funny. 5-stars.

Nice premise.

Sex is somewhat rushed.

Needed more preliminaries/foreplay.

She never asked him if he'd thought about her suring the week. Did he think about sex? What did he imagine? Did he masturbate to visions of her? How often? What did he imagine her doing to him? Him doing to her?

A good first story.

Four stars.

Great first story. Keep adding more details to draw out the emotions and interest of the characters and readers. 5 stars