All Comments on 'The Showgirl and the Engineer Pt. 04'

There is a large difference between shuttering and shuddering.

I suggest that you review all chapters of your excellent story and make changes as needed.

During your review I also suggest that you carefully evaluate if you have typed all of the words that you need to fill out the thoughts in each sentence. It is obvious to me that you have a very creative and well developed talent for writing but you sometimes

let your mind get ahead of your typing and leave out a few words or a phrase that needs to be included to fully express your concept for that sentence or paragraph.

Please take these as my attempts at constructive comments meant to help improve the already awesome talent that you have displayed in this work.

Looking forward to more of this story with great anticipation.

Lov Joe's hairy chest -- an exciting sight on a man!