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Click hereSue burst out crying again. She looked at him with tears running down her cheeks again, "Oh! Ted, do you mean that?"
He said, "I mean that I don't want a future without you in it. And I don't mean as a Skipper, I mean as a mate."
"I want that too. More than anything. I want to be your mate for life. I want your babies. Please put more of your seeds in me, now, please."
Rushed, poor development, far-fetched - maybe belongs in fantasy category. Interesting concept, but a writing disaster....
There is more for them to go through and be happy -
But is was sweet and simple - Love today over rules past issues - a generally valid concept -
A simple story, well told. It hit me just right. I was ready to give it a six or seven!
Thank you for sharing it.
Another great and loving story Susan thought if she confessed her past doings he would leave her but Ted didnt care about her past just hope the past doesnt come knocking on there door Then Ted will think before he says anything .
I agree with the other 2 comments. Potential, but not reached.
Lukas
A little setup that seems not too plausible, and fairly routine descriptions of sexual activities.
In addition, there are spelling and punctuation errors (finishing "forth" is an abstract concept; "fourth" is more likely), and the lack of contractions make the characters sound like Commander Data.
My advice: seek out a good editor. Good idea; only fair execution.
Nice story but... Look you write nice stories. Nothing wrong with heroes and white knights in armour etc. But you tend to overdo it a little (in my humble opinion). Take this story for example. We have a girl that is on course to win the championship. You won't get there without knowing your ship from inside out. Yet, your heroe takes over in his first 5 minutes sailing and make her perform better. Come on, that's just to much (I have been competitive in the Flying Dutchman class myself). Personally I think that if you would make your heroes a a little less "overwhelming" your stories would be better.
Best regards
Evert