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Click hereSheila gasps when we walk into the office, and I see Thomas go pale when he sees Ondine. I have a feeling this day just got a bit more interesting for everyone.
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Author's Notes:
Garbonzo really outdid himself editing this chapter, offering great advise, and catching quite a few things that I missed as the author. Sometimes with this whole story in my head, I tend to gloss over things that my wonderful audience doesn't already know. So once more, THANK YOU!
Also, seeing as this is the 20th chapter, I'm kind of curious. Who is your favorite character? Lemme know in the comments!
- COMMENTS
Anonymousover 2 years agoMY favorite character is Areth, though all of your characters are interesting and well developed.
DBs_Broover 2 years agoAuthor@Ramjet57
I'm terribly sorry you went through that. I hope your future holds many great things & thanks for the comments.
Ramjet57over 2 years agoI like Lyden, Guess I'm the sympathetic type. I was abused as a child and now have PTSD from it. I did a career in the Air Force with no issues, then my Father passed and I got hit with repressed memories and it gave me Depression form PTSD. I must take a pill each day to avoid it. Was very glad to see the ladies were not actually killed. Good story, Keep it up.
Anonymousover 4 years agoI shall have to go with my gut at this point (because as several have pointed out they are all quite good and I am sure my "favorite" has changed and will change again soon enough): Sheila. I look forward to her further development. I also like Areth Miranda and AnnaBelle much.
AutumnsBreathover 6 years agoI’ve been keeping up with the twins’ book for a while now, and thought I’d get around to reading the first Succubae Seduction. The second is making much more sense now. But I am glad I started with it and not this, because every time you mention hymens in this I want to smash my face against the keyboard.
Pain and/or blood = you haven’t warmed her up enough. Which I think you now know thanks to some of your kind commenters here. It’s commonly spread misinformation, so don’t feel bad about it. It certainly didn’t necessitate the abuse you received. Just a polite stating of the facts would have sufficed. It’s a shame Literotica doesn’t have an edit feature so authors can fix any mistakes after publishing. There’s really no need for people to be rude. All the authors and editors here do this voluntarily and are constantly improving. If people want professionally produced erotica, they can go pay for it.
My favourite character is Angela. And I think you’ve really nailed Lyden. I agree with some of the other commenters that he’s not particularly strong and alpha, but I think that’s wonderful. Those guys come off as arrogant and douchey. Lyden was shy to begin with, so the confidence he’s built is a good amount. Anymore would be unbelievable. And he’s had this crazy stuff thrust upon him suddenly, so of course he’s going to be confused, overwhelmed and unsure. It would be unrealistic for him to be a cocky assured leader and know exactly what to do. No one is confident when they have no idea what’s going on. Contrary to what Hollywood likes to portray, you don’t have to be alpha to be a leader, and Men do have feelings. It’s good to show that. It gives the character depth.
Anonymousabout 7 years agoYour ability to depict these characters has allowed my imagination to create them all, I am a glutton for punishment, give me the Amazon / Angelica, and I would die a happy man lol.
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