All Comments on 'The Surprise Threesome'

I see this was your first story. Good job! You managed to capture the heat of the situation really well, considering you only had 750 words to work with. Very arousing. There were some technical issues; better proofreading or maybe an editor can help with those, but even long-established writers have typos. Don't fret over a few. I look forward to seeing what you can do without a word limit.