All Comments on 'The Swim Team Ch. 02'

That's to good to be real

More please, I love this series,

This is awsome. Keep up the good work.

I have chapters 3-5 in the queue waiting to upload, but I need an editor to give them the twice-over for continuity and flow. The whole story should be done in about 6 or seven chapters. If anyone has experience in story editing and wants to volunteer to read through the work, please contact me.

Thanks for reading!

You've grown a TON as a writer between Touch Me and this. I normally don't vote on pieces people ask me to look at or edit, but there's just so much improvement, and I'm so invested in the overall story and characters, and wondering where this is going that I feel like I have to give it 5 stars.

So as the "Tina" when I was in high school (band, not swimming, yes, I know that's cliche and stereotypical) - you'd be really surprised what being open-minded and sexually-curious will lead to and what you'll figure out on your own. :-)

<3 Keep going!

Great

"was no audio on the camera" Bro, you had a week's warning! Get a mic already! lol. Thanks for the read.

Great slow burn. Loving the build up.

Who turned off the shower after Linda fell? Why did he carry a naked girl to the living room, where anyone could see her?

Chapter 2 with 5 hotties in the house. How come Brenda's dad hadn't dipped his seven and a half inch dick into at least one pussy?

Hopefully this will happen in Ch 3...