All Comments on 'The Swim Team Ch. 04'

While we seem to have waited ages for this chapter, it was worth the wait. You are nicely building tensions and uncertainty in our narrators mind. Looking forward to where you take it next.

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Devir Ginator

Thank you for the feedback. That's the kind of feedback that writers love to get. Stay tuned.

Keep em coming!

Dad sure seems to be missing a lot of obvious clues. Surprising for such a smart guy. I'm wondering when he'll notice. At least there's lots of fun sex to read about while the clues pile up.

@Devir Ginator - that is 100% my fault, I'm sorry!!! *Ducks, dodges, and dives from the popcorn, toilet paper, beer nuts, deez nuts, baseballs, tennis balls, your balls, and kettle-balls thrown my way* I was super-busy with RL stuff, and he made a major edit and I missed the email telling me he needed me to look at it again! #MyBad

Help! I need a new editor. Someone who is familiar with the story and has writing/editing experience. Please email/message me if you would like to help me finish this story. Chapters 7-9 are in need of editing before posting.

What a great mix of fetishes here, as well as a bit of a mystery. This series reminds me of my own series, The Jenna Arrangement, in that it's a slow build and actual story and not just a random series of sex scenes. This is definitely an inspiration to me to keep that going.

I read this last year when it first came out, even better the second time around!

Do you think the girls were performing for you. Better change that password. I'd so luv to see you busted, preferable while you putting on a performance of your own for Linda not your daughter.

Ooooh a mystery? Love it!

Well done, keepin the suspense. When will Barry fuck Linda.

Good job down memory lane.