All Comments on 'The Tidy Little Hotel Maid'

You really need an editor. The premise of the story was good, but, for example, jumping from past to present tense in the same sentence fractures the flow and makes it difficult to read.

It's TIMBUKTU

It completely detracted from content

...but readability is poor due to numerous, many funny, typos, grammar errors and sense/tense switches. 50% would be picked up by Word, and many of the rest by asking someone to just read it. Keep writing, but please remember your readers want your stories to flow.

Dialogue I’d adolescent, and the treatment of the written word is barbaric.