All Comments on 'The Twins Weave Ch. 02'

Wow!!! This is an awesome story and I can’t wait until the next chapter drops!!!

A great fantasy story but the writing is bad overall. If you could get a proof reader or an editor or something, then it'll be worth 5 stars.

Fun story! Keep it up :)

Great story and evolving nicely :)

Still finding some of the switching of character speaking occasionally off putting and spoiling the flow of reading and so requiring me to go back to try to work out who it is... and the incorrect use of speech marks is annoying...

Having said that i'd much rather keep on reading as is than have deterred you from continuing... just trying to be constructive :)

Really looking forward to reading more - many thanks

This is worthy as a complete story, without the sex.

I love it

This is one of the best stories i have read in a long time can't wait for more.

Outstanding. I cannot wait for the next chapters.

Can there be some scenes with Harold and Cassandra (Mom)? She fucks her younger son then starts getting emotional about her older son, then sits on his lap to convince him, I wouldn't mind that but I guess this story has a harem tag so that wouldn't be possible I assume?

I read your "reply" comment under the first part of the story, please don't worry about the story being lengthy there are a ton of stories that are in the "hall of fame" of this category that are longggg, just write what you feel like, looking forward to pt.3

grammar is much better. Still needs work but was definitely a more enjoyable read.Is the reason the mother stopped sleeping with the dad because of what they were doing to James?

Just to add to my previous comment I think it would make sense if James had asked about the relationship between their father and mother although I do see it was touched upon lightly in the form of Abi telling him they hadn't been intimate in years. Still though, feel it was glossed over too much

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I feel like I'm reading an outline of an actual novel. Seriously... a little fleshing out here and there, some backstory, some better dialogue.... you would have a serious HOF story like Three Square Meals going.

No need to rush. As is all your chapters so far could have been 40k+ words and your readers would be ecstatic.