All Comments on 'The Unlucky Superheroine Ch. 01'

You need to edit your stories before submission! The errors detract from a good premise. Read your story, then read backwards. This will help you.

Yeah, I know that. English is not my first language and actually this text was written in another language and translated, I even tried to fix the mistakes I found, but some always escape.

I liked that story so much, you did a great job here, there will be a second part? can't wait to see what happens next

You really need to get this proofread. I'm sure there are lots of great ideas here, but it's hard to get into it with so many run-on sentences and awkwardly-passed sentences. Things like "not to mention her *light and thick in addition to* her nice and juicy ass" and describing her swimsuit as "tight and tight" really undermine the story you're trying to tell.

A fantastic read, really looking forward to chapter 2.

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Is going to be a part 2? The story is great

This definitely deserves a chapter 2!

Hopefully Alice has some more magic to fight against Leprechaun if she gets back her ring?