All Comments on 'The Unwanted Swap Ch. 01'

Really liked the story. I didn’t mind it’s length. It could use more Gordon, though. Best character in the story.

Bring on Part2!

Greaaat tale…. Read in bits thruout the day. Am looking forward to eddie becoming lucky eddie…. Dive intoClaire and take away her woes!!

Great start. My only criticism is your taking the space to tell of their eating habits. It adds nothing to the story. Yes, that is me being very picky on a story I've given 5 stars to.

I am impressed. This is one of the best 10 stories I've read in 2021. You took a familiar scenario and turned it into something unique. The basement dwellers have to pop up and spew, but the more enlightened seem to be caught up in the good prose. I'm waiting for the next.

This is a wonderful story. The flow of ideas, information and perceptions of right and wrong is well crafted and detailed appropriately. I love your character development, and of course I'm cheering on your main character. I'm looking forward to Ch. 2. I'm expecting some real interesting developments. K

51k words is far too long for a single chapter given the volatility of this category.

One of the five best I've read! On pins and needles for the ...conclusion?

triane...remember what the Red Queen said.

I read all of Part one. I was fascinated by your character development and stressful social situations for the young couple.

I hope you finish this story soon.

Gary

Normally I'd be part of the "14 pages is way to long" bandwagon, but I was riveted from the get go

Good story, as always.

Bit repetative, as always.

Looking forward to part II. Wonderful character development

Very well written as usual but the same old story line...Bitch wife playing with her wimpy husband like a cat playing with a mouse before it kills the mouse. I'm sure we can expect a reconciliation before the end and all of the disrespect and lying will be forgiven by the wimp husband.

Pulled me in and did not want to put it down. Only complaint is having to wait for the next part! Well done.....

Honestly I can't see Eddie and Rose ending up together again. Even if she didn't boink Tony, which seems really unlikely, both her and Eddie seem to be in different places in their lives and both want far different things. Not to mention all of the lying and manipulation on her part, there are points in the story where it seems like she actually tried to get him drunk to boink Claire so she could boink Tony. At this point her and Eddie just seem long passed done.

Moving on, if Tony hadn't been banging Rose this whole time, and come on they totally were, then who was he banging that Claire wouldn't be cool with?

fuck Rose and Claire, Tony did what a scumbag, asshole does. Claire is a bigger idiot than Rose.

You're definitely a good writer. But you beat this to death and you STILL aren't finished! You had two choices - edit this down to the 4 or 5 pages of worthwhile story or put this in Novels and Novellas. Way, way, way too long and your constantly making Eddie look like an indecisive idiot got tiring. Rose is cheating on him. He knows it. Even if she isn't screwing Tony (I firmly believe she is) she's lied and disrespected Eddie enough to propagate 10 divorces. Are British men just spineless wimps? Don't know if I can stomach another 2 pages of this nonsense, let alone another 14 pages. And I bet you wait 2 or 3 weeks before uploading the net tome. UGH!

I hope after reading 14 pages isn’t doesn’t follow your standard story pattern - toxic female, manipulating, lying etc Reluctant husband with his own principles abs beliefs which he sticks to despite all the manipulation of the wife and her similar thinking friends. Break up, get back together x 2/3 or 4 times before husband suddenly gives in to the manipulation and they all live happily ever after in some bizarre odd sort of marriage. Let’s see something new!

A 5 star story for sure : freshly imagined, dense with detail, rich with incident. It does get a mite repetitious in spots, and I find myself frequently annoyed with Eddie and Rose. Love Claire, though -- she's the most sympathetic character in the tale.

So much like your other overworded tale....The Date 53 pages.............too long, too much the same, going to finish with the same result??? Perfect ending finding a new girl, not getting with Claire and not going back to his wife, simples but no you over complicate the stories with entitled wives enamoured with some rich bloke. Total nonsense, find a different thread where maybe the wife listens to her husband when he says NO, now there is a novel thought!

JJ

He might not have a pre nuptial but I hope she did. We already know who had the money,

Based on the title, I am guessing the next 14 pages will be Eddie was right all along, Tony and Rose were having sex starting weeks after the first party. Then Eddie and Clair end up together as a couple.

Good, good...hope you maintain the same depth and thoughtfulness in the next chapters. No race to the finish, you've whetted appetites with the characters and conflicts.

The comments are better then the story🥴🥴🥴

I usually love super long stories. Especially on a boring hot ass sunday. But this story?.. I didn't care for it. It was 14 pages of nonsense. It just basically was a wimp husband being told he should let his slut wife bang a guy she's been crushing on for a while. When she told him they were going to a swinger's party, as they were driving to the party and he STILL went to the party. I was about done with this bullshit ass story. I just don't know any husband's with balls who wouldn't of turned the car around🤷🏼‍♀️🤷🏼‍♀️. I still kept reading and hoping Edwin grew a pair of balls. Sadly, no. The whore wife berates and gets pissed off that her husband doesn't want to open their marriage. The whore starts lying to him, sneaks off out of town with her crush and yet still-- the wimpy husband doesn't file for divorce. He stands around, going back and forth with his slut wife and the other slut claire. The whore wife who clearly has no respect or love for him, basically tells him he needs to grow up and stop being a crybaby and just let her bang her crushes brains out. So he moves out finally. She's claiming they (her crush) didn't sleep together😂😂😂.. I don't believe that but ok. It was 14 pages of a weak indecisive man repeating himself. If that wasn't bad enough here comes the slut claire, she's putting him down, downgrades his moral compass and what he expects from his wife--- monogamy. Instead of Edwin telling the whore and her husband to go fuck an electric pole, he just sits there and take it. He even becomes friends with the whore. I don't like where that "friemdship" is going. It felt like him and claire will end up together, which makes no sense. He could just stay with the cum tramp he's still married to. Why saddle yourself with a new whore whose idea of marriage doesn't reflect your own?. Nobody in this story has any respect for edwin, not even Edwin. Edwin still hasn't filed for divorce. What is he waiting for? It was just a bunch of repetitive bullshit. Him explaining himself and trying to talk about morals to folks with no morals😂😂😂.. I skipped a few pages. I just couldn't do it. 14 pages and it's just chapter 1!. it could've been done in 5 pages. The story bored me to tears. I laughed so hard when claire comes to edwin crying cause her husband (edwins wife crush) is cheating on her😭😭😭😭.. huh?. How is it cheating when they're swinger's?. It was 14 pages with no resolution. Rose (Edwin's slut wife) got herself a boyfriend. Still I read nowhere about a divorce. Maybe I skipped that part. This story wouldn't be so bad if it made sense or was at least believable. Edwin seem to be trying to fight for the marriage while his wife is fighting to fuck other's.. I'm just baffled why he didn't immediately file for divorce? Between the lies, her trying to force him to become a swinger--- she even had the nerve to tell him he needed to see a psychiatrist cause he wasn't normal for not wanting them to open their marriage😂😂😂. Why would he want to stay married to that?!. Nothing he did or say was going to change her mind. I don't know if I'll read part 2. Where is stangstar? This site has went to shit since most of the good writer's has disappeared. It's more cuck bullshit pretending to be LW stories.

Now you have me madly trying to figure out where these characters go from here. Not that I want to BE any of them, you understand... :)

oh i so wanted to hate this story. i wanted to give up and sneer at it, i wanted Edwin to give in and swing so i could sneer at it, finally i wanted him just to tell Rose F YOU and Tony and Claire and be done with it. But this story is sooo much more. It's not about the sex, heck it's not even ABOUT sex! I can feel for Edwin and the lies he was fed, but i can feel for the others and how uptight he's being. But ultimately I am much more like Edwin and so I am rooting for him. 5 stars. More! More!!!

Okay, I don't normally rate stories until they're done, but I had to give this five stars. I didn't even intend to read it right now, but I peaked at the beginning and just got sucked along.

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I know some people considered Edwin a bit of a hard ass, and maybe he was, to an extent, but he was lied to from the beginning and at every turn.

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I'm relying on my rusty memory, but it seemed like for every decision Rose turned to Tony and disregarded Edwin. One thing that got me was when Claire referred to the swinging as being among friends, but those people weren't Edwin and Rose's friends.

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Going back to the beginning, even if Rose HAD talked to Edwin first, and got him to agree to the swing party, there was still the tiny, little detail that the key drawing was going to be rigged for Rose to get Tony.

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At the end I hoped that Tony was cheating with Rose.

I happen to know that the story is complete, that Cagivagurl requested that the two chapters be posted on consecutive days and they were submitted on the same day. When chapter two is posted is in the hands of the site moderators.

Really into this, and can’t wait for chapter 2!

You know last I read the statistics are swingers have a 95 percent plus divorce rate.

Great story, really had me interested, so finish it.

A roller coaster ride is fine right up until it is too much.

I guess my biggest gripe in the story is my perception of major plot holes of Claire, Rose, Tony, et al. all stressing the sharing between friends is cool if people have an open mind about it. Yet from the set up he was expected to fuck meeting people for the first time. I got the feel reading then re-reading is that 80% of the conflict is the swinger antagonists repeated blame Edwin, claim it is cool between friends but expected upon meeting him for the first time that he'd be down with joining a key party. This logic hole seems bad; the fact that in the last two pages Claire is magically written to not understand Edwin's POV but empathize better with him. Yet instead of taking time (and telling Rose to back off) Claire and Tony kept down the path of forcing an unwilling participant in a life style he didn't want which goes against everything they say. It is just hard to buy into the characters. Edwin is too good. Rose and company are too 2 dimensional. It's been said too many times in the first 3 or 4 pages it felt like the obvious response is separation and/or divorce and yet Edwin kept on cause he was the white knight hero of the story. Honestly, my reaction would have been Rose is a headhunter, headhunters work from anywhere; since they didn't own a house what stopped her from going with him if he was so lonely. And yet magic pull of that town...

Quite frankly I feel like this is something I've read before somewhere and Edwin is quickly moving towards hooking up with Claire in the next part and getting his happily ever after with the former model who can see his genius now her eyes have been opened.

One of their sappy soaps is on Literotica

So good I’ve read it twice. Hope next part is posted soon.

Good story. Please don't have Eddie and Rose get back together. All the lying and disrespect are too much. She can go on and become successful and wealthy, and will hopefully regret the games she played that cost her marriage and hopefully she will regret her choice of money over a family life with Eddie (i.e. seeing him get remarried and having kids in that house that she will envy and be forever banned from.

Very good story. Well written in my opinion as it captured my attention and kept it. Ignore the anon trolls. I prefer the longer stories. Never been a minute man so the length of it is great. Have you started on chapter 2 yet?

Thanks god I'm not the only one hoping this doesn't follow your usual pattern. You do write well, but I wish you'd try something new out. Different characters, different story lines and different endings. Keep up the good work, just please give us something unexpected.

I have enjoyed the story so far but I do agree with some of the comments here. It is kind of like listening to one of the stories by "Facts Verse" on Youtube, it takes 12 minutes to tell a story that should only take 30 seconds. I hope part 2 comes out soon and follows these suggestions.

Nope. When I read on p.8 that he agreed to go to another party again, I stopped. No more for me.

LWlurker

Unreadable dreck. The characters are all thoroughly unlikable, as well, especially the dreadful Edwin.

First look at Cagivagurl’s prior offerings…S(He) leans mostly towards cross dressing and transgender! This is a topic a normal author would avoid…ergo…This author is a transsexual or wants to be one!…most transsexuals neither have a clear understanding of what a man wants and also what a female wants ( emotionally or psychologically)….so you ahve a lot of cliches s(he) develops her story on…

The setup itself lends credence to this ….a wife totally disrespecting her husband erroneously assuming that it is ok to do this( a womans POV)… a wimp husband not able to prevent himself from allowing his wife to lead him by his gonads! A swinger couple who keep interjecting themselves into the MCs life and MC again wimpy enough not to put a stop to this! Not the way a male author would

Portray his MC!

The way Cagival writes and the way this story is progressing …

I can definately state that the ending will be as follows

- MC wil sleep with Clair…Rosy will sleep with Tony…MC will feel that his original views were too outdated and this is a nice new way of life..

All will live happily after! Blinking each other and all pigs around!

Way too long. It could have been condensed into a 3 or 4 page story and been very effective.

The story started OK but it went into very strange territory "Curiouser and Curioser" It was WAY TOO LONG and filled with situations that are so unreal they are annoying! I wanted him to get with Claire.... and perhaps Rose at the same time! He needed to live a little this guy was a total mess! 2 STARS was the best I could do although I wanted to give more based on other stories I have read by 'Cagivagurl' It just needed to get out of its rut and move on! It ended up like an addiction, I couldn't stop reading however much it hurt and annoyed me! I WANTED IT TO END.... BUT IT WOULDN'T..but it would be nice if it had...You are a very talented writer but this story went the wrong way... totally!

eddie one stupid mother fucker.,

What a story! Multiple storylines skillfully interwoven, complex characters (overly, perhaps), wonderful settings, but sometimes strained and overly lengthy dialogue.

I'm wondering if Eddie is going to get his retroactive permits, but in the big picture, it's meaningless.

I love Eddie taking jobs and profiting in unexpected ways. Nice to see that the old school ways still work.

Gordon's character is a wee bit of a leprechaun and I'd say that's intentional.

Tony is a lout and needs his stacking swivel tightened up. I only pray it's not Rose, although it seems obvious. At some point, Rose must tour the house and see what she's missing.

You've foreshadowed the hell out of Claire and Eddie, it almost seems a foregone conclusion. I liked Claire's insight and helpful influence. I believe she can give up her swinging lifestyle if they get serious.

I'm hoping Claire has the money and Tony can be bankrupted.

By far, your best work, ever, and most of your stories are excellent! I can't wait for your next chapter!

If your wife passionately kisses another man in front of you, tells you she wants to bed him, tries to get you to bed someone else so it is ok for her to do so, establishes a long term relationship with the same man after you asked her not too, effectively dates this guy without telling you she is doing it, continually lies to you about their relationship and then leans on him rather than her husband for support and guidance, what do you think the result should be if the husband wants to keep any respect at all? I suggest that you end this with Eddie and Rose being divorced quickly but still being personable with each other, find a way for Eddie to keep the house he built and she keeps the money she's made, Tony and Rose should not get together (he's a cheater), Claire and Eddie should not get together as a couple either (how could he ever get with someone who willingly and actively helped to break up his marriage?), Tony goes bankrupt after the divorce from Claire and when Gordy ends up being an agricultural buzzionannare and takes Tony down somehow because Tony's hurt his wife's close friend and end on a happy note with Eddie creating his own business or partnering with Mark and funded largely by Claire's skills at raising money. Typically in these stories Eddie would meet someone and live happily ever after, wouldn't it be ironic if you found a way for Eddie to end up living a somewhat open relationship with maybe only he, Claire and Rose (if she truely didn't screw Tony)! That might be the last nail for Tony too.

I have to say. I thought this was going to be another trash job on swingers. But I stuck it through and I'm glad I did.

I was a swinger with the EX and I do miss the lifestyle sometimes. But the current Mrs. Kal made it clear early on that she was not into it. Out of respect and love for her, I never brought it up. It was not until recently that I let her know about some of my experiences. She can't believe that I went cold turkey off the swinging habit just because she said no. But when you love and respect someone, you don't manipulate them or lie to them to get them to do something like swinging.

The swingers I knew detested cheating and lying. I know, you BTBers read about swinging here and think you know us. You know shit but the bullshit you tell each other. Most swingers detest new people in the lifestyle. Most of them still think like conventionals with their petty jealousies, inadequacies, and selfishness. Who needs that BS drama? I hope the rest of the story is not a swinger-bashing thing. I like how Clair explains the concept of "why cheat when you have an open hall pass (open marriage) or limited one (swinging marriage?)" Only an idiot would do that.

Tony's cheating speaks for itself. He has access to other women without the need to cheat. I hope that is explained somehow. Because once again, why cheat when you don't have to? Why cheat when you can do it without taking the chance of losing your spouse, family, and financial status due to divorce?

Please don't turn this into a morality and preaching session any more than it is. What was done so far, while a bit repetitive, fits the story. Any more and it can ruin the flow.

What an interesting story. I am looking forward to more chapters. Please hurry asap !!!! Hrags from NC...Go Pack !!!

I prefer to take on reading shorter stories in general and was going to walk past this but I got hooked and am really enjoying it. I’m looking forward to the next installment!

Thank you!

Brilliant, loving it. The characters feel so real, stupid most of them but real. Looking forward to the next episode.

@RedPandaSeven - Yes, it's supposed to be among friends, but he never met them before. They keep saying, "It's not for everyone," and no pressure, then they keep trying to drag him in.

Well written. Long, (but I always get bummed when a great read ends) but kept me the whole way through. I really enjoyed the detailed play by play of his restoration of the cottage. I know, not exactly erotica, but, man does not live on bread alone.. Looking forward to hopefully to a conclusion. Great read as always! Thanks!

Got through all 14 pages and really didn't like the story. It's a story that could have run to much fewer pages the story spent far too long with the wife trying to convince the husband to swing. It's a discussion that any husband would kill before it began if that's not their thing. The premise that a wife would try to wear down her husband because she wanted to try swinging just doesn't run. The husband would very soon either go for a separation or demand her seeing a therapist. The husband would have the sense to know that by allowing the wife to continue to discuss it he would let her think that he could be convinced. Doesn't wash.

Sequel please.

I disagree with some of the comments. This is your story, write it for yourself, I was entertained. I do hope there is more coming or are you going to leave it like GA’s “February Sucks” or Kalimaxos’ “ Just Once”? Either way, I was entertained and I appreciate the effort.

Great story. 5 stars. I’m really looking forward to part 2.

I agree w/the last comment. It’s a compelling story in certain ways, but it’s too long. I got about halfway thru when I realized you said it was chapter one. 14 pages as chapter one for this category is too long. Now, if you put it in novels and novellas, that would fit, but I probably would never have read it. So, basically, you’re damned one way or the other. You also need some better proofreading, but it’s not terrible. Your main problem, to me at least, is that you dragged out the story too much. It’s got good bones, but you’ve overextended it. Just my two cents.

Rose: "Jesus, nobody was forcing you. I didn't see your arm twisted up behind your back. Damn, you can be infuriating sometimes."

Really? From the gitgo, Rose uses lying by ommission, coercion, belittling commentary, witholding of information, a self interested sales pitch, the hostess encouraging him and who knows what else! All except physically twisting his arm up his back! All in order to make good on her contract! ...and I have bary gotten into this story!

Eddie's thoughts: 'I didn't want to share Rose with him.

The wealthy snobby bastard had everything he ever wanted: house, money, cars, a beautiful wife, an ex-model. Yeah he had it all. The only thing in my life that I valued above all else was Rose, and I didn't want to let him get his slimy hands on her as well.'

This sounds like a reference to the new testament parable about the rich man who had flocks of sheep and goats yet takes his poor neighbor's only lamb to provide for some unexpected guests. Tony seems to be someone like this. He should sense Eddie is not into this lifestyle, he should man up and tell Rose he will sign or not sign onto her deal as a headhunter based on the merit of that deal. He should dismiss the idea of swinging with her and trying to coerce Eddie to satiate his disire for Rose....but he's SCUM.

If this writer can come up with an intelligent plot and learn how to write male characters, she would be one of the best here. This story, however, is schlock.

You have done a great job of bringing the characters to life. This story is definitely invoking an emotional response in me.

It is hard to feel empathy or anything for characters suffering from self-inflicted wounds.

It was a tad long for a first chaptet3

Wow. I am completely sucked in. Wonderfully written.

A five-star effort.

Hooked

Absolutely loved it. Many of the critics are saying too long et cetera et cetera et cetera.... But what I found fascinating is that there are several stories involved along the same time line and it's just not about sex or a revenge burned the bitch type of story.

Is as usual the writing style is great, Is the intrigue is great. The only thing that is not very good about it at this point is there is no 2nd chapter yet....

Can't wait to read what's next keep up the good work!

Wow, great story so far. I admit I am not a fan of wifeswapping, my moral framework pretty much aligns with Eddy. It does seem to me that Rose and Eddy are not on the same path, no harm no foul. Not saying that Claire and Eddy do either. They seemed to click pretty well in a lot of ways, but the swinging stuff you just can't beyond. Its kinda like a deal breaker for most people.

This story has so many twists and turns much like real life has. I just hope that Eddy doesn't have to compromise his morals in the end. He seems to have done the right thing at every turn and has done very well for himself. Don't see how he could be still in love with Rose, yes the memory of her, before she started to change. Me the reader never really got to know her, but she doesn't add up to the memory that Eddy has of her. I just hope this doesn't turn into a poly relationship with a RaaC in the bargain.

Very good tale, thoroughly enjoyed reading that. Eddie is correct in that he cant trust Rose, she lies too much, about important things, to be trusted. He is better without. However, owing that property and improving it is going to cost him in the divorce. Unless Rose has made quite a bit thru her stock investments. Really hope you submitted this consecutively, and I have something to read today or tomorrow.

This would have been nice in 5 - 7 installments. Don't think I care enough about the story to read another one this length.

Page 1

"Look lady, if I was going to swap it wouldn't be with this crew. We're leaving or at least I'm leaving this old folks home."

Then I'd make damn sure the prospective employer knew their hoped for CEO was a swinger.

Whatever happens bad after page 1 the dumbass deserves it for continuing to the party after his wife warned him. Really tired of LW stories where the MC deserves his fate for being a total dumbass.

Page 3

Dumbass went there again. Just dump her you twat.

I am completely engrossed in this, so I am hoping for a continuation. This, so far, has been a accurate depiction of how desire and intent coupled with lies of omission, can destroy a marriage without any physical act occurring (although I won't be surprised if it has already happened). It's funny, when I looked down and saw this was 14 pages, I was disappointed. Now I wish it was longer. I can't wait to read more of your work.

Page 6

MC continues to be a total dumbass. Dragging it out like War and Peace.

Awesome! I hope you do not turn it in to a crazy revenge story. I think it would be nice if eddy goes to another wife swapping party dressed awesome turning all the wife's and guys heads ,Clair has a complete make over looking awesome too. he meets Clair there and instead of going of with someone else they get together and you can see the love between them which make Clair's husband and rose very jealous.

It's a trap Eddie, Claire has got you primed to bed her then the trap will snap shut and they have you.

Rose should have been kicked to the kerb long ago for all the lies and emptying the bank account.

This is well written but maddening. Typical gurl story, she describes the perfect, honest guy who is saddled with a crazy wife. Why does he love her? She claims to miss him when he was away for work but she squanders the occasional weekends the have to be together. Now that they are separated, why wouldn't he file for divorce to protect his assets?

His crazy wife is a liar who wants the house that he is building. He could lose during the divorce. Nothing about the story makes any sense. The idea of swapping with people who are your parent's generation is just gross.

reasonable man

On and on and on...Just dump her and move to the other end of the country.

Awesome but please don't turn it in to a crazy revenge story. I think eddy should go to another party but dressed to kill a complete make over like rose has never seen him before and she is stunned. Claire should be there knowing he is coming but tells no-one. She is dressed to impress as well. They flirt alot turning everyone heads including her husband and rose making them very jealous. Then they dance together kissing you can see the love between them and then ,rose tries to get a dance or even gets a dance to she knows it is to late they only have eyes for each other. In the end they leave together hand in hand. Leaving everyone jealous specially rose and Clair's husband. 1 year later Clair is pregnant an act of God. Eddy gets a message from rose wishing him and Clair all the best as she sits crying at her desk wishing she could turn back time.

Page 10

Good grief. Fuck Gordon too. Hit the road. Find another job far away and start over. Fukemall.

Page 11

Awe hell. You are going to fuck this up and turn him into a little bitch aren't you?

Eddie was never firm enough. Tell them all to fuck off and have nothing to do with them. However then we have no story.

Page 13

Like watching a wreck about to happen and not being able to do anything about it.

Page 14

OK, did NOT see that coming. Fuck, now you have me hooked dammit.

You swapped names between Rose and Claire a lot.

I enjoyed it a lot. Thanks for Eddie sticking to his morals.

Amazing, love it 5*s and can't wait for the next

So far Gordy is interesting and from a plot standpoint, like Mark, vital. The author seems focused on rehabbing Claire for some reason yet to be known. Rose and Edwin? Don't care much for either of them. The writing? Top notch, even overcoming a personal failing of mine which is my lack of patience with British English. Some day I need to try and figure why that grates on me. It shouldn't. It's just language. /shrug.

I'm looking forward to seeing where this goes.

please continue this story......please

Can't say this isn't filled with emotion other than sex. But its too over the top. The idiot is destroying his marriage but than I would have ended she lied about the freaking party.

I want to like it but is too repetitious and dragged out. Eddie has a crystal clear moral stance, no sleeping with someone else when you are married. His wife classifies it as "immature" because she can't get what she wants, fucking someone else. He never backs down and neither does she. Two such diametrically opposed people cannot closely coexist. His wife lies to him and manipulates him over and over and he keeps coming back for more.

I don't think swinging is a viable lifestyle but I have read stories where it is respectfully done. OK. This is NOT such a story. Further, you get Claire thrown in into the mix, parroting his wife's position and questioning his maturity. Claire is "supposed" to be sophisticated, smart, and nice person. She fails in character every time she meets and badgers Eddie. It doesn't matter what Claire and Tony think of swinging. Eddie doesn't want to, END OF STORY. Yet, his wife and Claire can't let it go. They can't respect Eddie's beliefs or Eddie himself.

One or twice would be enough but we get 14 PAGES of repetition and suffering. Even after Eddie has left his wife, he still considers getting back together with her even though NOTHING HAS REALLY CHANGED. Claire is starting to elevate Eddie because he is building a house, a status symbol to her. However, she STILL refuses to respect his wishes.

OK, I'm curious as to what has been going on during all of Claire's marriage but if Tony is really a cheating ass, will anyone be surprised? Will we have to read through 14 pages to get to the obvious resolution?

One thing I do not understand in this great story: If Claire wants Rose and Edwin to stay together, why is she the one that keep them apart after the party. They could have shared the taxi, but Claire needed a "conversation" with Rose. If I been Edwin I would filed for divorce and specially after Rose go away with that fucking idiot Felix the actor.

Being repetitve to drag it out does not make it a better story or compelling. All that does is make it incredibly boring drivel that needs a lot of editing. This should have been 5 pages maximum.

Amazing story, amazing writing, you got what it takes to be a great writer.I can’t believe I read the 14 pages so far.but you got my attention . A long one coming . Can’t wait.

Great story so far. Very well written. However, to go that long to end it "there"...hate to say it was obvious, but, really?

Love it so far! One of the best I’ve seen lately.

I sincerely hope this doesn’t turn into a RAAC. I also sincerely hope he doesn’t settle for Claire. That would be equally bad. Peas in a pod those 2.

The story begs for an ending. It was well written but there were repeated themes and it became a bit redundant. There is the obvious ending that Rose was cheating on Eddie the whole time but it would make me feel like there was no true love between Rose and her husband which I find hard to believe.

Why don't you have the story finished before posting!!! If it is finished? Then post the damn thing, what is it with all this bull %$@& posting stories in little bits hope that's not how you go through life leaving jobs half done and taking an age to finish

Great story though love all your stories !!!

Eddie is the single worst fucking character I’ve ever encountered in any form of entertainment in my life. Awful. Fucking awful. Please stop writing.

Without the quartz counter tops it wouldn't be a 14 pages long story, next time remember your readers have a life.