All Comments on 'The Video Store'

That was hard to read. I'm guessing English isn't your first language? The narrative jumps around, the chronology is inconsistent and the language is stilted.

There is no actual relationship/loving wife. She fucks whoever she wants to fuck and to hell with her husband.

Plus, how stupid is her husband? No knowing that all those guys had fucked his wife during that summer they were "broken up". How did he not know, given that those guys were friends of his. Just pathetic.

This reminds me of my wife. She's a slut not a whore. Whores get paid. My wife gets fucked for free because she loves big hard cock both in her mouth & in her cunt.

I hope there is a part two. Great storu

An unusual, but interesting situation. CZOFTW has already commented about the story needing to be constructed better. In addition to that, what would make the story better for me is an element of 'tension'. How about making Sara a prim and proper wife slowly (making it a longer story) being led astray by her friend. All that high school summer break-up stuff isn't really necessary. It sucks any tension right out of the story.

This has the same theme as your story, "The Truck Stop". I like the theme of a wife being led astray by a friend.

Hot Hot Hot story 10 big blazing stars. For this story about a sexual couple and video store! Thks Buster2U