All Comments on 'The Visit'

Scotty I loved the story you had some typos but other than that i loved it i hope to read more chapters to your story please continue beam up more of your story.ha ha

Pat

Atlanta,Ga

Pat

At this time there is no plan for a Chapter 2, however that is subject to change. I can see some very interesting posibilities when East meets West in the shower bath. Hummm

Scotty209

Just a tad over-the-top. Like the typical porn film; people swarming over one another like ants - pull out of one hole and stick it in another. Try just a little bit of reality, please.

Sent this to the author as a private comment, so for the author this is a repeat. Seeing the other public comments, at least one other is in agreement:

Thanks for the story. Having a few of my own, I realize how much it takes to write this.

The story is a bit lacking in plot - it reads more like a script for a porno movie, which I guess is why porno flicks are not known for their quality - LOL. A little more character development, a little less instant sex, would make an improbable plot into a plausible one. For instance, the idea that this gal that has not been raised in a "liberated" family like this would instantly jump in and allow her sil to eat her hubbies cum from her pussy just after having eaten her dads from her mom's pussy? OK, let's lead up into this gradually and it works (maybe) but certainly not right off the bat.

This author certainly does show a vivid imagination! My only complaint: No new postings for over a year. C'mon Scotty give us more.

Great job

I'm sitting here with my cock dripping down my hands while I'm putting my sounding rod in and fucking my cock

I'm going to get my wife to do me tonight while I read this story to her tonight

Wish I could post a picture