All Comments on 'The Wife and the Waitress'

Perhaps a voice from the waitress -- what is she thinking when she takes off on break and when she walks up the widows walk and is taken from behind. Getting her narrative would be very sexy -- and why she would be convinced by Cat to do it

How mundane. And predictable. And boring.

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Quality attempt, I hope you keep trying. Thanks,

Thanks, yep the format was interesting to work through. I wanted to try to see through each person's eyes pretty much at the same time, showing at least a little of the differences we all have in perception when sharing an experience.

My kind of story. Mostly about the mind-blowing tease. And the part about actual fucking is kept rather short. But yeah, the pace is a little odd. A few things being repeated by both parties, keeping the story from moving on. I also would've like to know what the waitress was thinking.

Teasing in public drives me nuts too! Hope you have more like that