All Comments on 'The Young Apprentice'

Good premise and good beginning but its like the story cuts off just as it is getting started. That's great if you have a Chapter 2 coming. I encourage you to continue the story.

That's it?!

Cuck shit

Well it appears I picked a bad place to stop. Please accept my apology.

I'm working on part two. And for the (cuck shit) comment, the story is leading to a family foursome.

But not complete! What you have written, as far as it has gone, is pretty good. This is far from a complete story. It ended just when the eroticism was beginning. If this is meant to be continued, then it should be marked as a pt. 1, if not, then take it down, and consider finishing the story and then reposting.

There has to be a little more you can do with this.

Please don't keep us waiting too long.