All Comments on 'Their First Swing'

Enough said!

Easy enough to follow and the storyline is believable. A hot swap in the hot tub is very believable. Thanks

read this you did this and I did that to you crap. I stopped at the first paragraph.

2nd person stories are always hard to do. Try another from the 1st person. They are easier and make more sense for newbies.

BTW, why is it that it takes watching someone else fuck your spouse before people can go home and have satisfying sex and "intense orgasms"??:

...with the rather rude commenters above. "I did this and you did that" formats don't work.

I stopped reading.

I agree with the rest of the folks here. Second person stories are a waste of time! The best thing you could do is rewrite this story from either the first person or from an omnipotent standpoint. My recommendation is first person. They feel more real!

Not a single emotion, feeling or care was given to the reader. I want to care about at least one character in a story. I didn't. Sorry.

stop writing or learn how

Typical boring swinger garbage.