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Click hereThe folders she picked contained detailed information regarding the city's socialites and all their deeds.
"Look like I need to give those whores a special visit, can't let my man be taken by those lowly trashes."
"My Love, wait for me!" She hugging herself as she imagined the boy was the one who hugged her.
John would never expect that his twisted fantasies really came true and it would come to him with a shocking surprise.
- COMMENTS
BoringDudeabout 3 years agoNice try, but you need to work on your English. I suspect it isn’t your first language - it’s always hard to write in a foreign language. That said, all your characters talk like Yoda, which is beyond distracting.
deepediaabout 3 years agoAuthor@anon: Sorry if it's horribly written, could you elaborate further? I always seek what I could improve, I assure you as the writer that I will edit this later if I know where to improve it.
Anonymousabout 3 years agoThis fails on story content - there isn’t any - and on readability. The English is the worst I’ve seen on here, and it makes it incomprehensible. Two stars for the idea, but I won’t be reading any more of your submissions until you get yourself an editor with lots of time and patience.
