All Comments on 'They Wanted My Wife'

Hmmmm where is the rest? It just stops

Is that it? Good start to a story then the writer must have gotten a brain aneurism.

An intriguing and quite good opening, but.... Sorry. You have a story trailer, not a story.

Is this what's commonly referred to as a 750 word "flash story"? Just asking as there's not much to it.

Good start to a story. Gave it a 4. Will be waiting for part 2.

Just love it when a person sticks up for what's right. I thought I had a friend who proved me wrong. That SOB not around anymore.

Is that it?

Not much so far, it's not a story yet. Looking at the author's writing history, we can expect part two in about three or four years.

Interesting start, where's the rest. 2** for incomplete.

Needs a bit more detail and an ending

A three because no ending

Why post a story that has no ending?????

Damn! Normally I thoroughly dislike those psycho-MCs who go postal on the cheaters. But THIS shit clearly deserved that response. Real shame the story is so short!

Guess the cunt writer had a brain fart

Where's the second part? Obviously, they're still alive. Vengeance !! The Bear semi-approves. Finish it.

The BEAR

Great start

Great to read a story about a man not wanting to be a cuckold.

AND?

Wow what a surprise. Another author who doesnt finish. Im not liking this trend atm. Why bother writing a story and leave all the good stuff out.

Where is the F...ing ending

Could've gone so much longer. 5/5

Nato_

This is a strange short story. It does not come close to telling the complete story but it was a very interesting story as it was. I liked how Dave handled the situation. He needs to kick that cheating wife to the curb. Five stars for an inventive story here.

Excellent! I love it. There’s so much story here and so few words. Nicely done.

Author never seems to finish his stories ???

Luv the story but would really like some follow up on what happens next.

The story was too short and needs Part 2 to explain further!

UNFIT FOR A RATING!

I'd like to sit on that jury. I'd vote to acquit.

Where's the rest?

There's a good story in there waiting to come out. This may be the beginning or the end or somewhere in the middle.

I did admire your courage with the physical attack on the wife. Most authors confess to never thinking of striking a woman in their stories.

another chapter, or SOMEONE to write one to finish this damn story

So much more to be told.

Nice start. FTDS

5 stars for hitting the women too! ALL the guilty need to be punished!

It was a good start to a story.

You need to do part two - the fall out.

Nothing leading to or after!

Story needs to be finished!

I dispose stories that have no ending. Pure laziness on the Author’s part!

Ok. And then what happened? Good beginning to a story, but no finish. Gave it 3 stars.

Ending?

Nice complete story. Too bad some commenters have zero imagination.

Needs a 2nd chapter! As in Who?,Why?! What? (what is the aftermath) etc.

no ending

Dropped it from 3*s to 2*s due to no beginning, no ending and just a short scene from some where in the middle.

Good start, where's the rest or when's the rest?

Wouhaw, quel auteur... décidément, arrêtez d'écrire.

Story not finished, so 2 stars when it could’ve been 4. Needs a what happened when the police arrived at least. Another fucking author that just can’t compete a story. Bob

Well I would give it 3 star just because it started off really well. The description of how the guy feels and what he does when he slowly wakes up was fantastic. After he finds out his wife is in bed with a couple, the story nosedives off the ledge. The ending....well there was no real ending. The story line needs at least one additional chapter to clean things up. THey wanted his wife? For what purpose? Was she drugged too? Did she willingly participate in the sex? How long as this been going on or was it just this one time? What was the screaming all about while he was outside. Please finish the story or let someone else complete the story.

Interesting, well done. I understand the ending without completion, but I understand commenter wanting more detail, reasons, and likely retribution. You bring up a number of questions, including why husband was out of the loop, how long the wife had been involved with the others, her motivations, etc.

Thanks for the short.

-jog

Really like this story, would love to see a follow up.

what happened next?

Where is the story. Youstarted one but then just gaveup. You quit. Tellus when you are ready to write a complete story. Then maybe we will have something to read and can tell you what we think.

What story???

You really should have extended this. That said, a very good story.

Very good story, but should be under Flash Stories, so the abruptness and the pieces missing do Not detract from IT.

Good story. I can fill in the blanks, unlike other readers. Why do they insist on having everything spelled, and then they'd hate it just the same.

This is the first I've read by you. I don't see anything recent. I hope you will return the writing and submitting stories here.

I liked it as is, but a sequel would be entertaining.

As for my previous comment "spelled out" and "return to writing". I need an editor.

What, you get tired writing?

Bad show dude.

Not much of a story. A drugged husband finds his wife cheating and beats them up? Doesn't work for me.

Where isrest of the story it startedandthen stopped

Start The Damn Story.

Finish The Damn Story.

Nothing here but an idiots ramblings. what a doofus.

I guess everyone has different views. I really enjoyed the story. Some authors might take the story from another 3 or 4 pages. However, I think you got your point across, and told a very good story, very well. Difficult to do in so few words. Well done.

Not much of a story… more a concept to build a story around(?)

Good start to a story. So then what………..

Pauvre type quand on est incapable de donner à sa femme ce dont elle a besoin d'autres s'encharge heureusement !!!! Il avait qu'à s'en occuper au lieu de dormir ce con !!! Quelle réussite sa crise de nerf maintenant il vas avoir des soucis avec la justice cette couille molle !!! J'espère que le couple vas continuer à s'occuper de sa femme en lui donnant ce qu'il a était incapable de lui donner du sex de la bite !!!! CE cocu est un perdant un Pauvre type !!!!!

And then, and then, and then along came nutin'

FTDS...

Yes

Recovery and immediate action

Let us make up the painful punishment

That's it😡

Suggestion:if you can't finish the story. DON'T POST IT!!!!

Excellent story, 5 stars. As far as comments on finishing it, actually you did. Sometimes less, is more.

I think it could use a part 2. Not for him, but for their kids. We already know he's going to the hospital to get checked for drugs in his system, and Dave going there to try and fix his busted up face. I don't know about the 2 women though.

I love a good Short Story. This is a good one.

A man in trouble, suspense, betrayal, what

more could one want.?

We need more like this,

shr

3 stars for what's written knocked down to 2 stars because the story ended too suddenly & without any conclusion. Shit on you authors that write half stories. Bob

It had the makings of a good story, but it was way to short with not much of an ending.

End the fucking story

You gotta have intelligence to have imagination. You gotta have imagination and intelligence to fill in the blanks and understand.

Great story - 5*stars.

Deserved more setup and follow-up.

finish the stories they are just left hanging!!!

I hate stories like this one that leave me hanging. There's been a lot of them lately...mostly boring.

That was it! I guess you don't have the smarts to complete the story. 1/5

I believe the phrase is FTDS

Well written scene. ☆☆☆☆

Sadly for a large portion of the LW readership the punishment is the payoff and stories such as this are akin to coitus interruptus. JPB has thousands of FTDS comments yet remains one of LE's most read authors. Have no worries, good writing will win out.

Unfinished, what a bummer.

Not full story stopped just when it got interesting

Interesting but far from finished

Agreed, this story needs to be finished. It was a good start, I hope the author finishes it.

WTF was that? Good start, now finish it!

......That's it?...............WTF!

Would love to know what happens next

Not bad I liked it. Is there going to be another chapter? 🙉🙊🙈💨

It could be a 5-star, but if no ending, then perhaps 1-star. Odd though...it sounds VERY familiar!

I liked tis story but gave it 1/5 because it’s unfinished. Read it again, still unfinished but upgraded my score to 2/5

needs to be finished

A good start to a story but…and then?

I felt robbed of the ending.

Good story & an easy read. What happened to the ending? Did you run out of ink?

So what happened then?

A very real reaction to a horrible situation from a normal husband .Well done i need to read more of your stuff Micheal.