All Comments on 'Thin Red Lines Ch. 01'

Very good read, I can't wait to read the next part.

I can see this happening. Daughter flirting and teasing daddy to get him to buy her what she wants. Will be interesting to see how it progresses.

Love the subtle emotional twist at the end

Don't make the mistake of dragging your story out ....Oooops! You did, dumb move after reading your next entry. You need to put your 1 page chapters combined as 1 entry and get to the sex! Or lose readers.

On to number 2

A nicely done storyline with his daughter teasing her father so much.

I want to read what happens next, there is certainly a lot going on that we haven't read yet.

Thanks for the read.

great story. I love the long slow build up and the fact that the line has yet to be entirely crossed. looming for chapter 2 now!