All Comments on 'Thin Red Lines Ch. 01'

great story. I love the long slow build up and the fact that the line has yet to be entirely crossed. looming for chapter 2 now!

A nicely done storyline with his daughter teasing her father so much.

I want to read what happens next, there is certainly a lot going on that we haven't read yet.

Thanks for the read.

On to number 2

Don't make the mistake of dragging your story out ....Oooops! You did, dumb move after reading your next entry. You need to put your 1 page chapters combined as 1 entry and get to the sex! Or lose readers.

Love the subtle emotional twist at the end

I can see this happening. Daughter flirting and teasing daddy to get him to buy her what she wants. Will be interesting to see how it progresses.

Very good read, I can't wait to read the next part.