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All Comments on 'Things Take a Turn'

by TheycallmeMrBig

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BILLBADBILLBADalmost 8 years ago
rush

could be a better plot.but u seem in rush.give details abt women at home and more detail would b better.lookung forward to next chapter

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 8 years ago
"So without further adieu, I will dive right in."

You do realize, 'adieu' means 'Goodbye', don't you? Rushed, rushed, very, very rushed. 2 stars

Turtle1952Turtle1952about 7 years ago
I liked the fast pace

a good read and would love to read some more. Thinking this could be a wonderfully erotic story. Perhaps some background on who the girls at home are and just how much fun you have with them would be good reading too.

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