All Comments on 'This Is Us Pt. 01'

Dude, you MUST learn the English language.

Get an editor to make the story flow better.

Get an Editor and a Proof Reader!

author needs to learn to spell and use correct grammar

Decent story so far just need to proofread and correct your mistakes. But definitely keep going with. It!

Tough to have a private school education, and not learn to speak properly. The four (4) previons comments are only the beginning.

Yhe pretext is good, get the suggested supports and build these characters into a great story.

Not a bad start. However I agree with the other comments. Need to watch was/were singular/plural

Bad. Very bad. The massive tits and plump ads turned me off. No need for chap 2. Just let it die

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