All Comments on 'Three Laws - Story 01: Annie'

"This my hurt baby I'm sorry." ??? BataBitch needs a BataEditor and or BataProofread stories.

i agree with anon on needing an editor

Does anyone know a good editor? or can you recommend one you like? I know my spelling isn't great, Dyslexia is a bitch sometimes. I would like to improve my stroies. Thank you for the advice.

Feels like a really fake, really badly acted porno.

At the beginning of my stories I write a note "CONSTRUCTIVE criticism only please". If you don't like my stories that's fine. Tell me how I can improve, I appreciate the feed back. Leaving negative comments without suggestions on how to better my writing, is both unhelpful and unnecessary. Thank you.

You are pretty good at describing action, you still have room to improve but still good, i would have love it if you went into further detail of the sights and sounds your character is experiencing, i think it would truly elevate this.

Your voice is awesome. I love the humor you use throughout, it's very well timed and is unexpected given the genre. You definitely have a knack for storytelling.

Thank you