All Comments on 'Thursday Sucks'

Short AND stupid.

Was this shit supposed to be erotic? Because anyone who gets off on this is twisted.

This kind of sounds to me like a guy who was taking his wife for granted and not treating her right. He says the other guy was nothing special and didn’t have a big dick. I lay this all on the husband

5. Give me hell...

5 stars to writer. Reminds me of the time I was at work around 8 or almost 9pm and I got this strange nagging feeling. I usually don't have any kind of ESP, i was running a little carpet store in silicon valley. There was a bar behind us across the parking lot and a restaurant. I met a really really beautiful busty blonde that worked there. She actually moved in with me. Life was good. Until something made me lock up the store and drive a few blocks to this other little bar down the road. As I drove up to park near the back door there was my new gal swapping spit with another guy. I was totally shocked. I tried to think quick how the best way to handle this......I didn't think that I wanted to loose her. So instead just of attacking him and kicking his ass which was my first inclination I walked up and asked Bonnie why she was cheating on me. This caused complete and total panic on their parts. They both hopped into his vehicle and drove back to the bar restaurant Bonnie worked at. I followed them back to where she worked. Naturally I created a big scene just for laughs. But before I went in I made a few adjustments to his truck. Which I felt bad about later. Bonnie never forgave me for that spoiling her fun. We didn't last much longer after that. She was just a slut that had left her Hubby in AZ with 3 or 4 kids. All she wanted to do now was play around not settle down. Sluts will be sluts.

Ho-hum, dime a dozen scenario. Chance exposé, covert video, cancelled the credit cards. Hardly interesting. Maybe if you'd taken time to develop and then finish the story... 2 stars. Do better, please.

Not a good story line for 750 words as there's so much missing from the scenario.

this isn't a story

very good, short and to the point. I'm greedy though and want more retribution!!!!

How about an actual story with developed characters and shit.

wtf is that it.

???

Thinking of writing a story based on these rather pathetic notes?

Need more, where he beats her fuck buddy, and Danny horribly. Find some way to make Kirsty physically suffer, then go after Donna, she may be a good lay, before you ruin her...

Much toooo short. Not a story, but a Cliff's Notes (do they still have them?) of one. Could've been nice. --Bob

Just like a story but shorter

lucky he worked late that night, eh?

Please give this an ending as it's like reading a book with the last chapters torn out .

probably masturbating while wriing this b s of a tale

1 star

jesus christ another writer who cant write a full story..

part 2 please. "Honey, it was just sex, it didn't mean anything, etc. LOL"

Not full story too short

Tch,Tch,Tch. LP

This was not a story. Why bother?

Please rewrite this as a full story as it has potential, start needs a bit of tweaking but good .

Incomplete. 3 stars

Unfinished story, no score

Why start if you are going to finish the story? Nylondreams, you should give up writing.

Really need to finish it.

You call this a story

Way too abrupt! Could have been a great tale.

Bill S.

Is that supposed to be a story? If it wasn’t ridiculous, and discombobulated, even then it would be poor excuse for a story. I’m at t loss for words. As I remember, stories submitted to Literotica, are vetted. How did this one slip through the cracks?

Can't say I care for the 750 word stories seemswaste of time

Short, got the point across.

to short not enough said

So much more could have been made of this story abd fleshed a lot more. It ended just as it was looking to be a good story!

What's with these half stories

Yes, your short story deserved this one-star rating.

Just an outline for a story, why not right the whole thing!