All Comments on 'Tiffany's First Time'

Beautiful writing, Great Story, Great effort. WOW they are going to be "in love" by the time they are done! what a great experience, so very well described. thank you for a good job! 5 stars. Thanks Buster2U

A well written, goid story. An enjoyable read.

It's a sweet and lovely story, and I know I enjoyed it very much. Sending a couple of suggestions by private message.

You story can't help but take us back to younger years. Well done

I love this story. Thank yoyu.

One suggestion: the narrative repeatedly shifts between past tense and present tense. Edit your text using one or the other exclusively.

Lovely story, well recounted overall, though I agree with the comment over confusion between past and present tense…

One minor niggle: she's got an IUD? And still a virgin? Technically that's impossible. And of course, the IUD precludes the risk of pregnancy…

Overall, a really good tale!

The constant switching between present tense and past tense doesn't really work for me. Otherwise, a nice story.

It would have been so much better if you'd stuck to one tense - the switching was jarring. Otherwise, a good story, though some closure on how it affected their relationship would seem to be in order.

There’s something about first time stories that really gets me going.

This was beautiful <3

Would love to see a second chapter as both their muscles and relationship grow